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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello! :)

I'm actually so excited for Grace to go home and meet her parents. It's so surreal that she shares them with James, even if he's the one who was raised by them, and I really hope that she'll get the chance to speak with them and for both parties to get answers from each other. It's quite sad how uninvolved they were in one another's lives. I was also wondering, since Grace can see the future and the Potter parents (I think) die sometime before James and Lily do, wouldn't she want to meet them before their inevitable fate? Or maybe she doesn't know their fates, I'm not sure.

I actually quite like Peter, and I'm glad you're including him and making him an important and entertaining character. I like how sassy he and Grace are, and how she just really doesn't trust him. It's nice to see Peter as a fully participating prankster.

I don't really know what to think about Remus and Grace at the moment. I'm actually quite on Remus' side when he gets angry, because Grace is giving him mixed signals and being rather unfair. It's like she doesn't realize that touching and having intimate moments can mean as much as a kiss. They're clearly very physically comfortable and drawn to one another, but it's hard to see where the relationship is going for Remus and I can see how that's frustrating. I really liked when he was raging about her following what her book says to do about love: the line about the book telling her to snog Snape especially made me laugh.

So did the foreshadowing about Tonks! I loved how she kept bringing it up and Remus was just SO confused. "I don't know anybody with pink hair..." Well don't worry Remus, you will! The whole destiny and soulmate thing is just too complicated, I would probably want to rebel against it if I were involved. Sometimes it's just better to not know. But I'm quite glad Remus reamed Grace out: as much as I adore her, she did deserve it.

Lily as a klepto is quite funny. She really is quite quirky! I laughed when James didn't know who Grace was talking about when she mentioned Lily: I guess he can be a little slow sometimes. :P

Great chapter! I'm really looking forward to the holiday visit, I hope it all happens! :D

Author's Response: Okay, I think I've caught up with responding to your reviews!!

Grace needs to meet her parents, with the majority of her existence being kept away from them. I'm looking forward to writing that, very much. Grace doesn't know her parents fates, yet, as they haven't fit into her timeline of knowledge. I'm pretty sure that they die before Lily and James, as well.

I'm glad that you like Peter. He's quite fun during one-on-one conversations with Grace.

Oh the little bit of drama. Over the next few chapters, I've given a go at trying to write in-character to teenagers. -_- I hate writing teenagers, as it turns out, but there's a reason to my madness, so bear with me.

Grace is given mixed signals, Remus is confused, Grace is confused, madness ensues. I agree with Remus having justification for his frustrations, poor guy. This is where I begin to do something, so that something else can happen, for the benefit of something else. That's very vague, but I can't exactly come out and say it without giving everything away :D. Remus is blaming the book for her mixed signals, mostly. I'm glad it made you laugh.

She absolutely did deserve it, and you're totally allowed to be on Remus' side through the next several chapters, though I hope you see Grace's side. Tonks! I love Tonks, and it's hard to keep her out of the story, even when she won't be around for quite some time!

As I read reviews, I sometimes look back through the chapter to reread certain scenes. I have to apologize for the grammar upfront, *cough* apparently rereading it before I submitted it did absolutely nothing for the grammar situation. I'll have to edit, so sorry for having to read through all of that. "Grace felt regrettable" -- oh boy.

I've been trying to bring depth to Lily's character. How she became a repeat book-theif, well, that just happened, and I'm not entirely sure why, but it is entertaining. James can be a little slow sometimes :D!

Thanks so much, sorry again about the grammar issues ;).

-Rumpel


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