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Review:Infinityx says:
Hi there! I'm here for the review tag.
I was so intrigued by this chapter that I decided that I'll keep reading and leave two reviews for you instead of one. :)

I love the way this chapter begins with a letter rather than a narrative. It gives the story a wonderfully mysterious touch as soon as it commences. Then when I read the line "writing this letter with the dirt from under my fingernails" and "I'm trapped in this cell of a room with no comfort but writing to you on the walls," that was really amazing. It was such a powerful way of setting the mood of the story. Those lines were just brilliant. I was immediately struck by an image of a forlorn young woman, desperately wanting to return home. The way her feelings are expressed towards this Rob character seems to suggest that he's her boyfriend/fiance/husband which is really interesting since your ship says Teddy/Victoire. I'm really eager to find out how that happens as well.

Your descriptions are really vivid and leave a great visual impact. It's really horrible to imagine being stuck in a place like that. *shudder*

You've done an amazing job at writing their escape. There's so much adrenaline pumping through each line and it was so engrossing. Then finally, the mystery character. Your description of him really gave me the chills. And since there's a mention that it's someone they trusted, I can't wait to keep reading and try to guess who he could be!

Also, I'm quite partial towards alliterations and I really loved one of yours - "small splinter of sun."

This chapter really keeps the interest and questions flowing, which is the mark of a wonderful first chapter. :)

- Erin.

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