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Review:marinahill says:
I really love Molly's narrative voice in this. It's so snarky and sharp. I love the internal monologue that you write - it really brings life to her character and fleshes her out.

I like that this story doesn't start from a point of "oh no, my boyfriend broke up with me, my heart is breaking". She already knew that she didn't want to see him anymore and I like that about her. She's very sure of herself. Her parents' reaction to her news was very telling. Clearly she feels this pressure to provide them with the perfect daughter with the perfect life but she's not living up to it. Poor thing. Loved the analogy with the lamb chop, too. So funny!

A very good opening chapter! It's always nice to be thrown right in there and this chapter certainly does that. Well done!


Author's Response: Thank you! I've never written an extended piece in third person, so the inner monologue proved to be a bit of a challenge.

Molly is very sure of herself, but at the same time, she isn't either. That makes her a fun character to play with. And I wanted to write about a relationship that was already done - people move on all the time. Expectations from family can feel suffocating at times. She's just trying to figure out a way to get through it all.

Thanks so much for this lovely review!

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