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Review:800 words of heaven says:
REVIEW SWAP!

I probably should have read something newer, but I was feeling nostalgic, and it's been a while since I read some of your earlier pieces, so I thought I'd give this a go. Also, I am going through a strange Alice and Frank phase, so I just couldn't resist!

I just love how everything is written so clearly, but the descriptions are still wonderful. The stain-glass section was just... ugh.

I liked getting this unique look at Alice. She seemed like a weird mix of Luna's kookiness, but with the insecurities that plagued Neville through most of the series. I've never seen her written this way before, but I think it suits her. I also liked how Frank and Alice's love story is very quiet, and just a little unbelievable, which somehow makes it even more magical. Augusta Longbottom sounds terrifying, but from the little peak we get of her in OotP, she makes a lot of sense.

THE ALICE IN WONDERLAND ALLUSIONS. I thought they were really well-used and just so perfect for that part of the story. Also - Alice and Alice - I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE.

I also loved that I felt slightly apprehensive whilst I was reading this. It was almost as if I was right there with Alice, getting that ill sense of foreboding and that something bad was just waiting to happen. It didn't help matters that Marlene was just plain creepy and that Frank seemed really... distant the entire time. It underscored that sense of isolation and fear Alice must have felt.

And that ending - there should have been a warning somewhere that I might end up crying!

Author's Response: Hello! :)

I'm glad you chose to read and review this, I'd sort of forgotten about it! :P Ah I know what you mean about Alice/Frank stories, there aren't very many but they're always so engrossing and tragic.

I'm glad you liked it, and the descriptions! I really loved writing this story so it's great getting feedback on the writing style. :)

Yes! I liked this version of Alice as well, I got quite attached to her. She is a lot like both Luna and Neville, which I hoped made her interesting. Augusta does seem terrifying- I imagine both Neville and Alice would share their fear of her!

Thank you! I thought it was a very convenient metaphor. :P I'm glad you liked it, hehe.

That is good! I wanted to make sure the undercurrent of danger and fear of the war came through. Yeah, Marlene was pretty awful here, but she had also been through a lot. Frank is distracted here. The story is about Alice, mainly, and while Frank is a part of her story it's hard for her to see beyond the confines of her own mind. I'm happy to hear it added to the sense of isolation, as that's just what I wanted.

Thanks so much for the lovely review, and I'm sorry if there was some sadness involved! :)


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