I love the details of history you've put into this story (and really, all of your stories) - that just makes it so much more alive, and really sets the scene so well. Hah, I love the idea that Jack the Ripper was a vampire, lol.
Jeremiah and the Lady are an adorable couple, I love the idea of them travelling to other paintings together and sometimes even causing mischief there, like getting drunk at the painting of the Last Supper, haha. It was so sad when they were separated, though, because they were auctioned off and sent to different homes. Sad :(
she wept dry tears of paint and plaster - that's beautiful. I love your word choice.
The background to the characters is so great too - Violet is mentioned like 3 times in the books and here she has a whole history, a personality - it's really quite cool. I like how, similarly to the Fat Lady herself, Violet's portrait is a lot kinder than the real thing! And speaking of personality, I love what you've done with the Fat Lady herself. You didn't even give her a name - she's just "the Lady" - but it doesn't feel like a name is lacking. The anonymity works and kind of reminds the reader that she is a portrait, not a person - she is static as the world changes. I don't know if I'm making sense at all, but I think it's a fascinating way to write a character!
It's cool how you've described walking between the portraits on the various levels of Hogwarts castle - I'd always wondered what that was like. Ooh, Sir Cadogan! HAhaha, you've characterised him perfectly and that was such a fun scene.
Aw, the ending of this chapter is adorable. I laughed that Jeremiah had stolen parchment from a scribe writing the Magna Carta :D Seriously the detail and the art you put into this is so great. The story itself is very artistic. This is such a cool story and so unique - since for some reason I hadn't done so before, I've favourited it and am eagerly awaiting the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: Hello! :D
Thanks so much! You know how I love the history. :P It was quite fun imagining what the Lady might have heard about the world outside and what wizards would think about Muggle affairs. Haha I thought it sort of made sense, especially with his mysterious appearance being orchestrated by the Ministry!
Aw, I'm so happy you like them! I think they're just adorable, and imagining their antics made me laugh. I know, it really wasn't fair for them. :( But life isn't fair for portraits here, haha.
I love that line too! :) Thanks for picking it out!
I really liked coming up with Violet's history and how she and the Fat Lady portrait might have met. I wanted to make the portraits different from their real person selves, since they are just imitations which gives them room to form their own personalities. I like your analysis of how she's static and doesn't have a true identity in the official sense of the term. :)
Yes! I sort of went a little creative imagining what it might be like. :P I'm glad you liked it, hopefully it was realistic in the sense that it is make-believe. I just couldn't resist putting in Sir Cadogan- he's a blast! :D
Haha, for as fancy as Jeremiah is, he's still got a bit of a mischievous streak! I'm glad you found the story artistic, that's just wonderful! :) I'm so glad you like it, thank you for the fantastic review! :D