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Review:Aphoride says:
Hey there - stopping by for our review swap! :) So I've seen this story mentioned a couple of times around the forums (I forget where...) and I've always wanted to read about it, but never remembered when I had time so I'm so glad I could stop here now!

I love love love the premise you've used for this. The way they have a friendship which is more but no one else knows, and the idea that Scorpius has to marry a girl and have children to preserve his family line/name/etc. and that he might - potentially, I guess - choose Rose. It's not something I see very often, and something very difficult, but gah, you've handled it so well and I love the way you've introduced it! The way Scorpius already knows it's how things are going to be, he's just... well, too scared and hesitant to admit that it's how they'll be, you know? He's young, exactly as he should be.

I love your Scorpius and Albus as well. In fact, all your characters are so great - Draco and Astoria, Harry and Ginny... they're all done so well! They all feel so real, you know, like they're actual people. I loved the little mention you made of Scorpius potentially being afraid of his relationship with Al, coz it seems a bit more serious - I think that's a perfectly normal thing at 16/17 to feel. I know one of my sisters felt like that. It really fleshes out Scorpius' character and highlights the differences between him and Al.

One thing I noticed was that when Astoria went to Scorpius' room she said 'Draco', not 'Scorpius', which was a bit odd. Just a small thing, though ;)

I'm so curious about where you're going to go with this, what's going to happen, how Rose is going to come into this and whether or not Scorp and Al are going to work things out and end up together (I hope they do!). It's such a great start, really! :)

I hope I spot this again soon... ;)

Aph xx

Author's Response: Aph!! I think this was mentioned in the Secret Santa thread (there were excerpts posted for milominderminder to read). I only just posted it so you haven't been missing out for long!

!!I'm really glad you like the preimise for the story. I felt a bit wicked coming up with a plot line that I knew would be so potentially hurtful to the characters. I guess it's not the first time I've trampled on characters like this.

Their friendship might seem like more to other people but then they don't want to be presumptious (that is people like me who are always caught by surprise when two people turn out to be togther). I Malfoy family continuation thing came to mind when Maia posted something on the forums about slash in next-gen and any hang-ups people might have. I kind of had an idea of this story then but that solidified my idea about making it the conflict about kids veruss love.

Ooh, I haven't thought of age as being part of Scorpius' hesitence. but, you're right, at 16/17 he's really too young to make life-long decisions or to make them with real conviction.

It's great that you like how I did the characters in this. I'm such a next-gen n00b that it was like starting from scratch for them.

haha, I'll have to go change that. I kept catching myself type Scorpio instelad of Scorpius and I didn't look for writing his father's name.

There's at least a few chapters until the end. There will be a lot of ups and downs all around but I haven't quite settled on an ending yet.

Thank you so much for a wonderful review! I'm glad we got to swap!

-Rose


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