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Review:ReeBee says:
Here for our review swap!! This was so interesting!!!

Firstly, characterisation. I LOVE how you've chosen Roxanne, almost no one writes about her and this was super interesting! And Thackery was a very unique and clearly expressed personality! :D I loved your characterisation of the characters! VERY amazing!

Description: well handled! I think the flow of this story is quite fast, but controlled very well! It may be moving quickly, but it was written in a way that didn't seemed rushed or forced, that of course is due to the description :) Just sort of a natural relationship :D I do think adding a bit of setting description would help the reader imagine the scene more clearly :)

Plot/Flow: Well, I sort of mentioned this in the last part... But, anyway, I think it's fine and the flow's quite good, but I also think u need to keep an eye on the next chapters :) It might become too rapidly paced, so far, it's fine, but slowing the pace down in the next chapters would be good :) I love the idea about the weird petitions! :D

There were no major grammar or syntax errors :)

All in all, I loved this! Great job! The concept is so fresh and interesting! Yay! :D Thanks for a super fun review swap!

-ReeBee

Author's Response: Hello! :) Haha, I'm glad you found it interesting! That's what I was hoping for.

I agree, Roxy barely ever gets much attention! I really liked coming up with an idea and character for her, I'm quite attached to her now. Ah, Thackeray is unique! :D They're both a lot of fun to write, so I'm pleased you enjoyed them.

It is a lot faster paced than my other stories, now that I think of it. That's a great point about setting description, I'll definitely work on that in the next chapter. Thank you! :)

Sounds good, I'll definitely keep an eye out for that. The next chapter is already written so I'll have a second look and make sure it seems well paced and flows nicely. :) I'm glad you like the idea, it was fun to come up with things they might be up in a fuss about!

Thanks so much for the lovely review, I'm very pleased you like it so far! :)


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