Hey! Here to review your entry for my challenge!
I've never got the opportunity to read many Bellatrix/Voldemort stories before so this was a pleasant surprise. Bellatrix come across as the perfect aristocrat here, except for her..ahem, thing for Voldy. Boy am I glad that it was just one-sided.
Your beginning was great, the quick description before diving straight into the plot was enough to drag my attention into the story.
What I find extremely interesting is the new angle that you've brought into the story explaining why Bella wanted to become a Death Eater. Granted, she fell in love with Voldemort, but she was feeling trapped. I noticed that you repeatedly use the word cage, like a restriction. Whenever I think of Bella, I think of an unrestrained soul, almost too free, which is why she was borderline insane. Many of the stories I read talk about how she bent the rules, how she made her own rules. Then I see that she's been shackled to a life of fancy dresses and useless husbands. It intrigues me that someone so outgoing and determined can feel chained and trapped. It's a new angle to Bellatrix I never thought about. Aah, I can feel the gears in my brain beginning to rotate!
I really appreciate seeing Bella as a feminist. I think in that context, you have used the quote brilliantly. I like how she isn't afraid to tell Voldemort exactly what she wants even to the extent that she starts shooting curses at him. In that paragraph I can almost feel her frustration at always being considered part of the weaker gender.
What I also noticed is that she loves Voldemort for his power and for the power he can give to her if she plays things right. Of course, what she doesn't know is that Voldemort will never share his power with anybody, not even his most faithful servant. However, it's nice to see Bella's daring attitude when compared to girls that melt into puddles of mush while talking to the person they love. It shows how strong she is as a character.
What the story leaves me with is, surprisingly, sadness. Not because it is poorly written, which it isn't by any such means, but because it makes me wonder what Bellatrix could have been had she been raised differently. She's such a force of nature, if only he could have used her strengths for good, perhaps the Wizarding World could have been a much better place. I guess life is full of those if-onlys.
Overall this was a wonderful piece that touched upon so many angles of Bellatrix's personality. It was certainly a pleasure to read this story and thank you so much for participating in my challenge!
Author's Response: Hello!! :D
Yep, I really don't know how many Bella/Voldy stories there are, but the quote you gave me really lent itself to feminism, so I thought, "Why NOT Bellatrix?" I tried to make her as Bellatrix-y as possible, and I think that her *ahem* thing for Voldy is something that really makes her who she is. Thank Merlin for unrequited love, though--I agree, that ship would be a DISASTER if it really sailed. :)
I'm glad that I got some gears in your brain rotating! It would seem that some of my stories end up being about cages--in the sense that someone is trapped in a situation they don't like, so they try to get out of it in any way that they can. I figured that Bella would have that problem as the oldest daughter of the House of Black--she gets very bored very easily, and I think that she was probably tired of having to do all of the traditional pureblood things. She was destined to be a raging hurricane, a fighter, and Voldy's ideas enticed her because they offered her an opportunity to do something that she actually wanted to do, for once.
Yay, the quote! I was really happy about this quote because it definitely fits with the feminist mindset. In Jane Austen's work, Persuasion, I believe that it is said by a sister to her brother, but I thought that it would be fun to have a woman say it to a man who was trying to tell her what she could and couldn't do. At first, I thought that I would try Molly Weasley I and Arthur Weasley, but one day Bella/Voldy hit my brain like a train. From there, I didn't look back. :D
Oh, thank you for getting exactly what I was trying to say! I was a little worried that Bella would seem off if I made her too feisty when confronted with the Dark Lord, but I wanted her to stick to her guns. Of course she doesn't know what he's actually going to do to her--force her into submission, that is. In this particular moment, she's blinded by the power that he has and she wants it for herself. She's certainly not like other girls, and I'm SUPER glad that I got that across! :)
I'm sorry that you're sad! But I'm relieved that you don't think it's poorly written, haha. Bella very well might have been a great champion of good, but we'll never know. She's all bad, all the time, and I think that's the way I like her--it's not that I condone the terrible things she did, but her actions make her MOST interesting as a character. ;)
It was my pleasure to write this story for your challenge! Thanks for the supermegafoxyawesomehot quote (also, thank you, Jane Austen, for writing it!)! :D