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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi Kristin! :) I'm here for your first of two prize reviews! Yay! :D

This is such a cool idea for a story! Gah, I love how you've given the Longbottoms a second chance at having a life. But I can't help but feel that there might be something sinister going on, that perhaps not all is as it seems. The miracle seems a little too good to be true, and I can't help but imagine there will be some sort of repercussions. The beginning section reminds me a little of a Stepford-wives or utopic sort of place where everything is idyllic until the underlying cracks and issues are revealed.

The contrast between the beginning and the ending was really interesting! I like how at first, their lives seem almost too perfect and picturesque: from the birds singing, to the lovely and peaceful imagery of the curtains swaying in the breeze. The line about the storm coming in was an especially powerful transition, and set an ominous and warning sign that something worse is coming. It seems like in this new world there is no conflict, since the woman running has only left her oven on! :P

I love the title of the story and what it might signify- are the memories from the past going to come back and haunt the Longbottoms? What does memory have to persist against? Ah, it's so exciting. I can't imagine what it must be like to wake up after decades and find the world changed, and Frank's confusion and uncertainty about whether Voldemort is still around or not seems like the tip of the iceberg. To find the world completely changed would be enough to drive some people back into madness, I think.

I'm also looking forward to seeing the contrasts between the Longbottoms' present and past. Here, they seem quite passive and good-natured, and I'm curious to find out if these are their natural personalities and what the war in the past might bring out in them.

Ooh, who was the man who died? Are there more dark powers stirring? I hope for Frank's sake that there aren't, but for my sake that there are, because I love conflict and excitement. :P Frank and Alice would be such unlikely heroes after all they've suffered and since they're no longer as young as they were, so I love how they're the heroes of this story and how they will overcome adversity.

You have some really lovely description here, and I really like the details of little things, like Alice having a purple folder, or the clock chiming six times, or that they drink Earl Grey. It's really powerfully done how the scene really comes to life and I almost felt like I was there as well.

I have absolutely no idea where you're taking this, but that's a really fantastic thing. Looking forward to the next chapter and what you have in store for Alice and Frank! :D

Author's Response: Hi Jenna! Thank you, what a lovely review!!

I really enjoyed your theories about the calm before the storm, so to speak. I can't confirm or deny any of your questions just to keep the mystery but I love that the chapter has made you think that much! I'm glad you liked the imagery and the transitions.

You're right, they are kind of unlikely heroes. By this point they are middle aged, and at least in the world of HP that seems to be an unlikely age for a hero haha. (How crazy is it that Harry was such a hero, defeating Voldemort and saving the world, at 17? Seriously, what was I doing with my life at 17? :p Anyway...)

Thank you, I really appreciate your comments about my description! I myself love description - in other stories and my own - and so I appreciate it when people notice mine, haha!

I wish I could answer your questions rather than just giving you the most vague response ever, but I can't :P Anyway, this was such a wonderful review and I'm so glad you enjoyed the first chapter! ♥♥


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