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Review:Elfwynn says:
Goodness me! This is so creepy.

I love all the creepy mythology and folk tales that you use at the start. It seemed like some of the imagery that you deployed had quite a few *almost* religious references and connotations. Was this a deliberate decision or did it come from the myths and tales that you found or just something implicit in the way you were writing? I only really know the role of the incubus in the Merlin legends so I would be interested to hear what you think.

At first, I wasn't quite sure where the 'Harry Potter' factor was (if that makes sense). However as the creepiness factor begin to grow, it seemed to draw back from the purely mythological and historic to evoke an increasingly sinister connection between the incubus and the witches of the wizarding world.

I love the voice that you use - it feels as if the narrator is whispering quietly in your ear; telling you things - evil secrets that should be repeated.

Finally, when I was struck by the revelation of the name, I did a double take and I had to go back and re-read it from the beginning!

I love the way that that this piece seems to draw you in carefully and then suddenly slaps you with a realisation that puts everything in perspective. It acts like a crescendo that ends with a sudden clash of a cymbal!

Really nice work!

Author's Response: Hi! :)

Hehe, I'm glad you found it creepy. Creepy is the most fun to write. :)

I'm glad you liked the references and the religious imagery- that was very much on purpose! I sort of combined the research I'd done with some of my ideas of restrained sexuality from the era and religious imagery, so it was a little bit of a combination. Many of the facts, like incubus visits being used to cover up unwanted pregnancies and abuse from relatives/family friends, were from my historical research.

That makes a lot of sense! It was tricky to work in the HP verse since there aren't any mentions of something similar, which is part of why I set the story in the Victorian age.

I love the way you described the voice, that's just what I was hoping for! Evil secrets that should be repeated... I like the idea that the incubus really wanted to tell his story and be heard. :)

Ah, I'm so thrilled to hear you felt that way about the ending. That was just what I hoped for, to have this plot twist which changed the whole story, so I'm glad that was the effect! :) A crescendo that ends with a sudden clash of a cymbal... I LOVE that!

Thanks for the lovely review, it was so wonderful of you to come by and read my story! :D It really made my day! :)

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