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Review:LightLeviosa5443 says:
Hi! I'm so sorry that I'm so late with this review love!

I kind of loved this chappie! It was a great start to your story! I really enjoyed reading a chapter that had a different family than I'm used to, but with the Potter's still involved. Always a plus, in my opinion.

I really liked the way you covered the relationship between all of the siblings, because it not only introduced them all, but gave me an idea of how the family dynamics worked! This is definitely different from Unexpected Parenthood, but in a fabulous way!

I think the story flowed really nicely. It was a fun little start to the family's day, and I enjoyed that mini Albus/Alyssa scene!! Alyssa should just give in and be all friendly with Albus. She knows she wants to!

There was only one little spelling mistake I noticed! When Ade is opening her presents and the picture and the note fall out, you say "I picture both of them up..." I think you meant I picked both of them up.

That was the only spelling mistake I caught in the entire thing!

Loved this chap! Great job! I can't wait to read more of this story!

xoxo Sarah

Author's Response: Hi, it's fine!

Different families are great and I love writing Alyssa's slightly crazy one. Potters are always a plus! :)

Thank you! I never know how to introduce the siblings so I'm glad you like it. And as for Unexpected Parenthood, chapter 39 is now up!

For moment Alyssa has no plans to give in, but that doesn't mean it won't come!

How I didn't miss that I don't now :/ Thank you I wouldn't have spotted otherwise and I've now fixed it.

Thanks Sarah! :D

-Potterfan310
Soph x


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