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Review:Elenia says:
Hi there ^^ I'm here from the review thread in the CR, although I probably would've wandered back here soon on my own too. I said I would be back, didn't I (:

Okay, so going trough your Author page, this one caught my attention immediately. One, it's Jily, my OTP ♥ and two, it's Quidditch. That's such a perfect combination, I knew I would love it before I even clicked it open. And I was right ^^ This was such an adorable one-shot, leaving me all fuzzy inside!

Characterization is definitely one of your strongest points. You did such a wonderful job describing these two. I liked how James had clearly matured from his earlier years at Hogwarts. But poor boy, I can imagine how shocked he must have felt, waking up to find Lily at his bedside. Who knew throwing yourself in front of a Bludger would accomplish that? I know James didn't. If he had, he would've done it sooner (;

I have so many favourite parts. James's pep talk was great, made me feel all excited about the game. And I loved how his gaze searched for Lily even if he didn't realise it at first. That was adorable. Also the mention that it was Remus who pointed out that his tactics with Lily weren't working, that made me chuckle. Trust Remus to be the voice of reason ^^

I really liked the Quidditch part, but I think I would've wanted you to go into it a bit more. I think it was a bit more rushed than the rest of the story.

But otherwise I think it was a very strong one-shot. Showed an important moment from their life. Oh and that ending, such an hopeful ending. It's kind of bittersweet, smiling at first at his happiness at that moment and then remembering what will happen to them.

Your writing was great as always and I'm once again applauding you for such effortless dialogue. It feels very real and natural.

Great work, dear (:

~Hanna

Author's Response: Hello again :)

Honestly, you've spoilt me so much with your lovely reviews, I honestly can't thank you enough!!

Jily is my OTP too!! Gah I just love the cuteness of the two of them :) I'm glad the story didn't disappoint!!

Yes, I much prefer older James. I'm really not into the shouty hate matches that go in between the two of them. I know it happened but I just ignore it :) I'm glad you liked his mature side though

Gah, I know the quidditch part is probably a little rushed. I had this idea in my head a long long time an just couldn't get it out and so that's why I wrote it - quidditch it turns out though is really hard to write so that's why it probably felt a little rushed. I must try and lengthen it one day...

Oh I know what you mean. I like to pretend the ending as we know it won't happen and I can leave them frozen in little moments of happiness like this. Maybe if I pretend hard enough...

Anyway, thank you so so much for an amazing review. I can't tell you how much I've loved reading them and how much I appreciate your thoughts and opinions.

Lauren :)


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