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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Grace, here for your first of six reviews!

Ah, this was such a great first chapter and so funny too! I really loved your characterisation of Lily as a Muggle nut (have you done a one-shot of her like that before or was that someone else?) as it was so much fun and I really wanted to hug her for being so cute and nerdy like that. I think some of my favourite parts were the ones when they mentioned how she got a laptop and couldnít get out of her room due to surfing the web and how she spoke the muggle teenager lingo as that made me laugh a lot.

I loved all the mentions to the other relatives too such as Arthur loving that someone was taking after her in that respect and then how Harry refused to give her anything muggle for fear of never seeing his daughter again. All those cutesy family things really made me aw about how cute they all were and made me want to join in with the Weasley family banter.

The narration was really great with the great comedy air that you have a lot. I really liked the use of third person too because it meant we got the outside view of how wacky Lily really is. I think you may have slipped into first towards the end so you may want to review that but other than that it was off to a great start!


Author's Response: Gurl, what up!?

(Was that a little too much?)

I'm so glad that this caught your eye because this is one of my favourite things that I've written so far simply because I'm writing muggle nut Lily. I have indeed written a one-shot (two of them in fact) with her just because I couldn't help myself.

I think Arthur would've been very excited to finally have someone in the family that was fascinated with muggles as he was. I can just picture the two of them freaking out over a remote control together and trying to figure out how it worked.

I was originally going to write it in first person point of view but I figured that the story would be a lot funnier if it was told from third person (and apparently it is). will definitely go back and fix those slip ups in the chapter though so thank you for pointing that out.

Thank you so much for your lovely review!

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