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I love the way this starts out - how she catches pieces of conversation as soon as her ears are painted, then when the artist modifies them she can't hear anymore. How odd it must be, to be a painting in the process of being painted haha. (I laughed out loud that the Fat Lady's first view of the world was the painter's nostril hair.) If I'm not wrong, is that the same Violet who later becomes friends with the Fat Lady? Well, I guess it's just the name I have to go on - could be just a coincidence. :p
Hufflepuff's cup?! The Fat Lady isn't some relative of that woman in HBP, is she? Hmm, you are very tricky ;) (also how ironic would that be if the woman who later guards the entrance to Gryffindor Tower is actually a descendant of Hufflepuff.) Anyway, I love the way you describe the world inside and outside the frame. As viewers from the outside we can't see all that's inside the frame, but from the inside there would be so much more to see, and I love how you explored that in here.
I felt like I was going on a little adventure there as well, travelling between the paintings with the Fat Lady and Jeremiah, seeing all the different paintings from the inside! I love the part about the dragon drying off Jeremiah's hat, haha. I also love the detail about the original painter making a mistake, and how that blemish remains on the subject.
What's really interesting is how (at least for now) the painted subjects don't seem to have the personality of their real-life (well not real, but real in the story) counterparts. They are similar in appearance but that seems to be all, at least for now.
By the way, I did notice one typo in there which says "feat" instead of "feet" when describing the cherubs on the ceiling.
Anyway, this is such an original idea for a story and I really loved the first chapter! I will definitely be back for more - you are an excellent writer :D
Author's Response: Hello!
I loved writing the beginning and I'm so happy you enjoyed that part. I agree, it would be so confusing, especially since she is quite intelligent and knows that there is something going on. Haha, yes, I imagine seeing nostril hair would be quite disturbing. :P Hehe, there are no coincidences in writing (well, maybe there are in some stories, but in this story most coincidences usually mean something!).
You're so clever! :) Yes, there is something going on with the cup, and it would be quite ironic indeed. I'm pleased you liked the contrasts with seeing inside and outside the frame and what that would be like, I had a lot of fun imagining it!
I wish I could wander around in the portraits! It would be a great deal of exciting. Haha, I thought the dragon was funny as well. I figured that the portraits would be quite delicate and that little mistakes would mess with their outer and inner selves, so having a blemish would be more problematic to fix than it seems.
You're right! When I was researching the portraits it said (on Pottermore I believe) that the portraits can be instructed by their counterparts to act and be certain ways, but they aren't emotional copies of them. So I figured that while the lady can act like the Fat Lady, she's not automatically given the same personality. It's all very complex and odd!
Thanks, I'll fix that right away! :) I've been a great victim of homophones recently for some reason!
Thanks so much for the amazing review, as always! :) I really appreciate your lovely feedback! ♥