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Review:patronus_charm says:
Here for you second review!

I really loved how the Marauders burst onto the scene, it was so like them with all the dramatics and everything and you wrote them really well too! I really liked the intro to Peter and I hope he and Coralie can be friends because I always feel sorry for him getting forgotten and all. James was perfect too, and I love how you reflected his age by how welcoming he was.

I really liked the flashback as it meant we got to know a lot more about Coralie and her background and itís making me wonder how exactly was that guy connected to Coralie and what he did to cause the panic attacks, so it was great to see all of the suspense put in there!

The heart-to-heart with Lily was really sweet and it was so nice to see that they had begun to bond with one another and that they could lean on one another. Iím intrigued by Lilyís background with her mother having panic attacks, and then the tensions between her and her friend. I thought Coralie was going to end up with Sirius but I suppose I was wrong or supposing too soon :P

Wah Remus was a babe with the way he introduced to Cora (itís quicker to type :P) and he was so lovely talking about the history and yeah I just want to marry him because heís so nice and you can ignore this because Iím prone to fangirling around him. Sirius though. Well, what to say about him? I wanted to hit him quite frankly because he was so rude and horrible but then I loved this meaner take on him and I canít wait to see whether he turns into a nicer person or not.

This was a great chapter and I canít wait to read more!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Welcome back!

In a lot of stories I've read, the Marauders just get described or they meet on the train or whatever. I wanted to mix it up a little. I was never a big fan of Peter, but I really want to give him a chance to show how good he can be. I'm a firm believer in the fact that James wasn't always a bully. I've always sort of seen him as a big brother figure. I'm glad you liked him.

I really wanted to build up the suspense and mystery when it comes to the guy. Obviously, as the story develops there are more and more hints dropped about him and about what happened.

I love Lily. I especially love writing the friendship between Cora and Lily. They are definitely one of my favourite parts of the story to write. Ah yes, you'll have to wait and see with that!

You're more than welcome to call her Cora. I do it myself and I always have to remember to type Coralie in the story itself. Remus is beautiful! If I wasn't a Ronks supporter, I'd probably make it a more Cora/Remus story. He will have a bit of romance with someone else though! Spoiler alert- Sirius will become a nicer person. There is definitely a reason as to why he's acting like this though!

Thank you so much for these reviews. I love them!

x Ely


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