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Review:Holly_Mist says:
oh hai. i apologise profusely for the late review but life has been insanely busy. (hint hint: school). though irony is that im typing this review while im in school.

but, tbh i forgot what happened in the chapter since i read it ages ago so i just skimmed at it - so i'm going to comment on whatever i remember!

ep! i didn't expect Rose to be so nice actually. you know, i expected the typical kidnapper scenario like 'hey you shut up'. bad example but im sure you get the picture! i actually found scorpius pretty cold in this chapter. like, his personality seemed really bland for some reason - rose seemed to glow and scorpius was well - not so much. so, my advice is give scorpius some more depth so that the story is even more interesting :) although it might be the whole third person thing but idk.

so yep! i'm sorry for the crappy review! and hope to see a new chapter soon! :) xx

PS - i think your boards are going to be in march? yeah? so, i know its far (actually not so much) but i'm not sure if you're going to update because of prelims and stuff but good luck!! :D

Author's Response: Hey. No harm done with the late review :) I know how it goes.

I understand what you say about Rose not being like a typical kidnapper, but I think you might change that opinion a bit come next chapter ;) As for your other point, the thing is, I have always intended Rose to be bubbly and feisty and sparkling. She tends to overshadow not just Scorpius, but every other character. Quite honestly, I have too much fun writing her and have thought out her character the best. Scorpius, on the other hand, is meant to be like, reserved and stoic and someone who doesn't display his feelings, so obviously he appears colourless and one-dimensional in comparison to Rose. That, plus it's rather difficult to write him- he's unlike anything I've ever attempted. But don't you worry, he'll try his level best to outshine Rose in the upcoming chapters. And if not that, you (as well as Rose) will at least get to see more sides to him.

Thanks so much for your insightful review,

PS. Believe me, from this side of the New Year, my boards (they start on March 3rd, yeah) look a lot closer than I anticipated. But I might be able to post just one more chapter of this right after my prelims finish :D Deception is my guilty pleasure. And thank you for your kind wishes :)

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