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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there!

So I randomly found this story and it looked cool, so I decided to give it a chance. And cool it was! I really enjoyed the first chapter, and I will definitely be back for more!

I love the way you introduced Audrey's character without info dumping all at once. We already know a lot about her - her age, her appearance, her job, some of her relationships and a bit of her backstory, and yet I still don't feel like you've just told me all this information and now my head is about to explode, if you know what I mean. I think you told us all this information at a very natural pace and I feel like I'm starting to ramble so I'm going to move on to the next paragraph.

So far, I really love Audrey's character. She looks as though she is going to very entertaining to read about. She has a great sense of humour, but is not waay larger than life, she is slightly absent minded and clearly not that observant and she is not good at small talk! I'm looking forward to seeing how her character develops.

Oooh, I love that you included Draco because I rarely read about him in settings like this. I'm eager to see how he comes into the story and if he reverts back to his 'old ways'.

I love that you made Verity Audrey's best friend! I also love her character and their relationship. And because Verity works for George, that gives Audrey a big window into their 'world' which I'm sure will make for a lot of interesting plot lines.

Haha, the conversation with Percy was great. I love the way you characterized Percy and I also love that they certainly didn't hit it off straight away. I also want to find out more about Penelope - will we ever get the chance to meet her?

Awesome first chapter!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi Courtney!

I'm so glad that I didn't info dump, I remember the horrors of doing that when I started out writing so I've been doing anything to try and avoid it from now on because it's just so horrible and boring to read :P You weren't rambling at all, and I'm so glad that you learnt a lot about her because I was trying out a new way of doing that so I can use it again in the future hopefully!

I'm so glad that you liked Audrey as she is very dear to me and such fun to write! I'm actually sad that I finished this for NaNo because it means that I can't write her any more! I hope that you continue to like her throughout. :)

Hmm, I can't really say much about Draco without giving away spoilers but all I can say is that he is a very key character throughout!

Yes, Verity was that old shop assistant briefly seen in the Half Blood Prince so I thought it would be fun to bring her back but with a much more senior role this time round! I'm so glad that you liked her though.

Bahaha, yes they certainly did not hit off straight away! As for Penelope, if you check out the next chapter she should crop up in there!

Thanks for such an awesome review, it really made me smile! :D

-Kiana


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