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Review:academica says:
Hey, here from the review battle!

Quick question: are you copying and pasting your chapters in straight from Word, or are you using the Simple Editor to post chapters? The reason I ask is because using the first method is usually what causes these big gaps between paragraphs, and I'd definitely recommend that you try the second method if you aren't using it already.

Ooh, "the castle has eyes!" I'm assuming he means that people in the castle, probably other prominent Slytherins, will be watching Walburga to make sure she doesn't slip up or disgrace her family name. It must be intimidating to be surrounded by expectations like this all the time, and I do feel bad for her. I think what hit home for me was the fact that she considered the castle, not her actual house, to be her home. She just can't wait to get away from her parents and to see her relatively carefree friends again.

Speaking of Walburga's friends, I like them a lot. Sometimes it gets too much to see only stodgy, formal Slytherins when we know that even Draco and his friends had some fun at one time or another (okay, dubiously-motivated fun, but fun all the same). Walburga's interaction with Abraxas is interesting - is she perhaps repressing some feelings for him, or is it really just animosity to the core as far as she's concerned? At least she got away from Orion for a moment. It's sad to think that she eventually ends up with him despite her dashing male friends.

Nice work! Looking forward to the next :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey!

I will definitely use that advice. Thanks!

You're the first person to guess what 'The castle has eyes' means. Maybe you're wrong, maybe you're right. You'll have to wait and see!

I'm so relieved you like Elladora, Beaux and Winston. I am extremely nervous when I write them, because I want them to be human, but all the while not too human, because they have different opinions on things rather than Walburga, which is who I write through, so they make me nervous when I write.

As for Abraxas, if you find it interesting and strange, that's what I'm aiming for. Yes, at least she got away from Orion. Yes, it is sad that she eventually ends up with him.:(

Thanks, Amanda!

-Janelle


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