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Review:BenedictPumpkinpatch says:
Final Writer's Duel review.

"Not my usual standard" That was seemingly an apology. As if this story was going to somehow be sub-standard and that the reader should take that into account.

How very wrong. I have not read anything else by you (that will now change) so I have no point of reference with which to gauge your writing, but I can safely tell you that this is easily one of the best one shots that I have read in a long time.

You have a good command of the language as shown by your choice of words in several places. Your writing is tight and gets the story across to the reader without over complicating the writing. As the story starts we feel sympathy for the lonely wolf as he licks the window panes in his hunt for sustenance, later we realise he is a lycanthrope and he still has our sympathy. Then with a final twist we discover he is a young child. A child that is inflicted with this terrible thing that will continue to haunt him again and again.

You manage to convey feelings without directly mentioning them.. "He nudged a loose pebble into the flowerbed with his toe" This leads the reader to almost see the young boy slowly walking along, his mind elsewhere. This is something that all writers should learn to utilise in their writing. As the quote attributed to Chekov says: Don't tell me the moon is shining. Show me the glint of light on broken glass.

I enjoyed this story. You are a very talented and descriptive writer.

Author's Response: Omg, your penname. Is so good. SO GOOD.

Anyway - thank you so much for your review! Ah, i feel bad for apologising in the a/n now, everyone's been so nice about this fic!! When I wrote it I'd been out of writing for a while, so I felt very rusty. I also speed-wrote it the afternoon I got back from my final Christmas exam, so it felt like I was vomiting stuff into a word document after a month of art history revision.

Thank you so much for this review - you really are too kind! I love that Chekov quote; it's so true. It took me a long time to learn how to show instead of tell, so I'm so pleased it came across here.

Thanks again for your lovely review. I'm very glad you enjoyed it. ♥

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