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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hello! I'm here for the Twelfth Day of the Twelve Days of Reviewing. :)

Awww, unrequited love. I can totally relate to that, but it would seem that Marian has it worse than I ever did. She obviously felt things for Sirius Black that were far beyond the normal scope of teenage love, and he obviously had no clue. She never had any chance to tell him, did she? And even if she did, he would've laughed and brushed her aside for the next pair of legs that came along. That's really unfortunate, and I think that you've captured that really well in a relatively small amount of words.

Why does she pine after him so? Did she never meet someone else who caught her eye? What a terrible thing it must be, to spend one's life longing for a person one can never have! Will she die lonely, the memory of Sirius Black still etched in her mind?

I thought that this was beautifully written. I think you did a really good job with characterization of both Marian AND Sirius, even though Sirius wasn't actually in the story. The fact that it's addressed to him is just incredibly sad, because he'll probably never hear or read the things that she said. He'll never know how much she loves him, confessed with words that were chosen so carefully by you. :)

Wonderful story! I know it has a lot of reviews, but I'm just helping you get to 100 on this one. (That would be a cool achievement!) Happy Twelve Days of Reviewing!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: Hi, hi, hi and thank you so much for leaving this wonderful review! :-D

hehe I had a feeling when I wrote this that most people could probably relate to unrequited love, unfortunate a thought as that is (but yeah, Marian kind of took it to a new extreme - hehehe)! And you've hit the nail on the head! I'm so glad you could garner all of that from this story; that tells me that even with its simplicity, there was still some depth to it - which yay! haha

I imagine that some people, try as they might and close as they come to falling for a new person, still find themselves unable to let go of the past. It's really quite sad, but people truly experience that sort of thin, and Marian just... doesn't know how to move on completely. I love that you have these future questions though about her life! And truthfully, I've never actually thought past this moment! I like to think she'd be happy someday... :)

Aw, thank you! That's always so lovely to hear about my writing! And I'm thrilled that both Marian and Sirius were well-done! It is sad to think about that, but I'm so happy you liked the way Marian made her confession! *hugs*

Ah, you're wonderful; thank you so, so much! And hahaha! That would be INSANE! I was blown away that it even reached 50! 100 would be just crazy amazing! Ah, thank you again for taking the time to leave such a kind comment! :-D


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