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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Curie! Here for the final day of the 12 days of reviewing!

I really loved how you wrote Teddy and Victoire as they were so sweet together and I could really tell that they cared for one another as that seemed to shine through throughout this piece. Another thing I really liked was that though they had the fluffy moments, they also had those when you could really tell how much they knew each other and meant to each other which were really adorable too.

The flashback was really good too, because you wrote it really well and the tension between the two sisters was really noticeable. I also liked it because it gave me more background information to the story because I was mildly confused at the beginning about the whole proposal thing. If you are willing to edit this, I would perhaps include a small scene at the beginning of this with Dom not being proposed to because it will mean thereís more background information and great angst wise. If you donít want, thatís also fine.

I liked Dom a lot too because she was quite the firecracker and had me chuckling about how extremes. I do hope that she does come to terms with it in the end and perhaps it was best that she wasnít proposed to.

There were a couple of errors in regards to your dialogue punctuation so I suggest you check out the tutorials on the forums because theyíre really useful and great for grasping the basics of it.

Fun read!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hi Kiana!!

Thanks so much, I'm glad that stood our to u! Meansthe main thing I tried to so was accomplished! I'm glad u could see that too! I was kind of worried that the whole thing would be Vic being all angsty and no romance! Thank u for the reassurance :)

Thanks so much! And that's a great suggestion! I'll definitely add that in when I go back and edit! Thank u so much!

And I can't tell u how much I love u for saying that! A lot of people think that she's only a really selfish witch ( ;) ), but, all she is is a drama queen, or, a firecracker :)

Okay! I'll definitely go do that too! I'm terrible with grammar :(

Thanks for the super lovely review! :D

-Curie


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