Nadia! Iím here for the 12 days of reviewing and the challenge review, I would have read First Name Terms but I think I remember seeing that you didnít like people reading that (correct me if Iím wrong, because then Iíll go and read that too :P). Also quick question, is the chapter title from the song Run Boy Run by Woodkid, if itís not, itís cool I was just wondering. :)
Ah the stylistic choices in here were great! They really paid off even if you were a little nervous about them and coding (trust me, it gets so much fun when you do complicated coding and it works correctly. Not that Iím sad or anything). And yeah, I thought that it added another layer to the story and sort of showed how complicated Rose and Teddy were and all the battles that they had to face, and though that could have been expressed with normal formatting, this showed it in another light.
Ok, normally Iím like Rose/Scorpius all the way given that their my OTP, but thanks to Susan Iíve always had a soft spot for Teddy/Rose and you really showed me why I do here. The style worked well here too with the short snippets of their life so we got a really good impression of where they came from and how they ended up together. There was so much detail too and for a one-shot that was really excellent.
Even though there were quite a few mentions of the Weasleys and Scorpius, the focus always seemed to remain on Teddy and Rose and their story if that makes sense and I really liked that. It meant that we never got distracted by other things, and the other characters helped along in that way as they added small parts to their story. Ok, that doesnít really make sense in words but it did in my head so Iíll hope for the best here.
Ooh, yes, another thing I wanted to say was how you showed Teddy and Victoireís relationship too. It seemed as if it naturally had to come to an end and I liked in the closing stages of it, that Teddy was forced to put on act for them both. With the mention of Victoire not even really liking men can I assume sheís a lesbian? If so, I donít think Iíve ever seen that before so yay for that!
Aw the ending was great! It was the perfect tie in with Christmas and that they got the happy ending. Teddy was great though with him thinking that it was Scorpiusí and then whether you could be pregnant without a baby!
This was such a fantastic one-shot Nadia, and the results should be posted within the next few days. :)
Author's Response: Kiana, haaai! I'm sorry that I'm going to respond to this, and then respond to your other review (I think there's still one from Christmas, yikes!) but asdfghjkl; YOU ARE SO KIND! ♥ ♥
Haha, yeah, don't read FNT, it's terrible :P and no, I actually haven't heard of that band either, but I'm listening to it at the moment.. and it's rather catchy...
OOH, STYLE! Haha, I love how my writing has style when I myself don't in real life hehe.I love how you think of them as "battles" it makes the story sound even more cheesier :P I blame it on that fact that it is fluff.
As I was waiting for this validate, I was fretting and thinking, "What if there isn't enough detail??" and if you thought so, then wow, I'm so glad! I've never read any of Susan's stories for Teddy/Rose, mainly because they're multichaptered and that takes so long for me haha, but I will one day. I've tried and failed sadly, to write a Scorose, but maybe someday. I'm happy you liked the change :)
Awh, Kiana that made complete sense! I'm happy you never got distracted. I thought it might be a bit of a problem to readers because of the switchy thing.
AND KIANA, I'M ON THE SECOND SONG BY THESE WOODKID PEOPLE AND IT'S GOOD.
Yes, she is a lesbian :)I never pictured Victoire ever with Teddy, but I didn't dislike her either, so I gave them a natural break up. I'm so pleased it worked for you!
OHMYGOD, THAT PREGGERS THING! HAHA, THAT WAS SUCH CHEESE HEHEHE. But you liked it which is... weird but okay, yay!
Thanks for this brilliant challenge and review Kiana :) You gave me the chance to try something I'd never done before, which means a lot. So I'll be forever thankful for that :)