This is my first review of the Writer's duel winners. I'm reading them in order as they appear on the main page and will review them all, so here we go.
What a simply wonderful story. I loved the way you (as the writer) used the same, same, same problem as Rose had when you were describing her situation or the surroundings. Your descriptive writing is excellent. With a few name changes, this could so easily have been a winning entry in a Christmas magazine competition.
I know a woman with OCD and you're description of Rose fits her perfectly. I have a brother with a slight stammer and I could imagine them both in your story. It is testament to the power of your writing that I was carried along with the story and it seemed to end too quickly. You are a writer that I could read, read, read.
Two points. First. Yes you are right, glitter is a pain. Especially that sparkly, glittery lipstick. Don't women know how much of a pain it is to get that stuff off!!
Second. "Symetrically".. Thank you for this. I'm getting tired of using wonderful, fabulous, amazing. From now on I have a new adjective. I shall gaze into her eyes, softly caress her cheek with the backs of my fingers and say... "Darling, that kiss was symmetrical" and if that doesn't get me a second date I'l know who to blame, blame, blame.
Author's Response: Oh my goodness, this review. Just... thank you.
Before I properly respond to this, I just want to say that I think it's incredibly kind of you to be reviewing all of the winning entries! You'll make a lot of people very happy! :)
Yep... very, VERY happy. :-D Wow, this is such a kind review! It's incredible to hear that the combination effect of Rose's disorder both as a part of her dialogue and a part of the narrative has been so effective! I had a few concerns at first, but it's been only positive feedback on that front, so I'm thrilled (and relieved!) that it's worked out! And my goodness, I'm blushing. That's such a compliment - I'm still in disbelief I won this competition, let alone to be compared in this way! I truly appreciate it. :)
There's really nothing more rewarding than hearing back from somebody who can relate to the experience(s) you've written about and give you the mark or approval! It was really important for me to get both of these character's right and do them justice with their struggles, and I'm just ecstatic that both felt right to you. Thanks, thanks, thanks!
hahaha Glitter, right? It's honestly the worst. My apologies for any seemingly permanent attack it's ever had on your manliness! "Dude... are you wearing glitter?" "What? No!" :-p
Ahhh, I love that you pointed this word out! It was another moment I wasn't positive about, mostly because I wasn't entirely sure everyone would understand its significance! haha I'm glad you found it both accurate and amusing! hehehe And oh boy, I suppose should this tactic fail the next time you find yourself in an embrace, I'll have to owe you something or other... ^.^
This has completely made my day. Thank you so much for taking the time to review; I endlessly appreciate it. :)