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Review:kenpo says:
Hey, here for the 'Claw review battle!

Audrey gives me hope for Percy. She's often portrayed as female-Percy, and then their kids are mini-Percy's... but you've changed that up and I love it! I get the feeling that she can bring some needed chaos into Percy's life, while he'll bring her a little bit farther near the surface of the Earth.

Audrey's personality seems fantastic. She's a little... odd. But in a good way. She's awkward but I can relate to that. I'd be her friend.

I'm not sure about Verity. I'll leave it at that.

Percy! Hah! Percy! He's so conceited and pompous and pretentious! I love it! And Audrey doesn't take any of his criticism, because she's just that good.

George's brief appearance made me smile. How can you not love George? He's fantastic.

I almost forgot to talk about Draco! Draco is a thing! I like to see him in fanfics that show him getting out of his comfort-zone. He's obviously trying to avoid being the same person he was, and I think he's succeeding. I love that Audrey couldn't remember his name. He's so used to being Wizarding Royaly, and now he's an intern. I think it'll be good for good ol' Draco.

I'm gonna talk about Audrey some more.
I love how you portrayed her thought process. The swearing was perfect. Not too "oh, yeah, I'm swearing", but it just gave us a really good feel of what her character is like.

And she's a nerd, and she has a periodic table, and that makes me happy. The periodic table is one of my best friends.

Okay. I'm done. I don't think I actually said anything useful, but hopefully you're fine with that.

This was a really fun first chapter. I'll be reading more:)

Author's Response: Hey Kenpo!

Haha, I know what you mean about her being a Percy twin, but I think after the war, he would have wanted to find someone else and help him re-evaluate his life, and that person would be someone different to him hence Audrey being born :P

I know what you mean about Audrey being awkward, but then Percy was always perfect, so it was fun making her like that. Hahah, Verity is probably left alone.

I'm so glad that you liked Percy, he will obviously become a lot nicer but hearing your comments about him so far are making me laugh :P Yay for George too, I love him as he never seems to be anything and poor him.

I'm glad that you liked the new Draco, because being forced to deal with people who don't care about 'Malfoy' and that he's only just an intern must be a bit of a downer for him but it made me laugh a lot :P

Phew, the swearing was fine. I don't tend to swear too much in fan fiction, but with her it just seemed to be as if she needed to have that side to her.

Back in my chemistry days I loved it too, so I couldn't help but include it here! Don't worry about it not being a useful review, it was a fantastic one and I really do hope you continue reading!

-Kiana


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