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Review:TheSortingHat says:
This is a review for Day 10 of the 12 Days of Reviewing.

Wow. What a fantastic first chapter, truly. All of these different character dynamics were established and understood without being explicit about it; I already feel the pain that Andromeda and Narcissa will eventually suffer at their separation. I've never seen Rabastan with Andromeda before (although I haven't read a lot of Andromeda/Ted stories), and I can't wait to see how that plays out, particularly since Bellatrix ends up with his brother. Rabastan seems very controlling, and I fear that that could hurt Andromeda, although I doubt she'll stand for it for long.

The only thing that seemed a little unrealistic was that Ted should be so boldly addressing Andromeda, although I don't know either of them yet quite well enough to be certain. I'll be interested to see how their dynamic develops as the story progresses.

Overall, lovely structurally and stylistically. I'll definitely be following this story to see where you take it; I can't wait to see what you have in store for the characters. Keep writing!

--TheSortingHat

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the thoughtful review! I definitely wanted to write Andromeda and Narcissa as close, because I've always imagined that though Bellatrix and Narcissa both disowned Andromeda, they did so from extremely different emotional places. I wanted a contrast between Bella, who wouldn't give a second thought to labeling her sister a blood traitor, to Narcissa, who would be deeply hurt by Andromeda's "betrayal." Not a happy ending by any stretch of the imagination, but I'm really enjoying writing their interactions as close sisters.

You're right, Ted is bold (or stupid, or both...) in addressing Andromeda on the train. My Ted does tend to be pretty outspoken, and in Chapter Three there will be an explanation for why he specifically speaks to Andromeda on the Hogwarts Express that makes the boldness more justifiable. Mehhh? Or maybe not. Haha.

I'm very far into the story on my end, so you can be sure I intend to keep updating. :) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


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