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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi again!

I really liked the sort of flashback at the beginning of this chapter with Molly reminiscing about her children and what they were like when they were younger. It was a really sweet moment and reminded me that there had been happier and better times beforehand and that there could be again, you just had to wait for them to come along and it would be fine again.

The Quidditch match was rather fun and it was funny to see Ron get so angry about it. One small thing, I wasnít sure if it was a flashback or present moment so perhaps if you straightened that out a little it would be better. I liked seeing some of the lesser Weasley characters such as Bill and Charlie though because they were well written and had me laughing.

I loved seeing Angelina, she had her wonderful energy again and it really had me smiling and laughing away. I can see inklings of how she and George ended up together and it made me laugh. I really liked how she ended up being a Quidditch because someone at least had success which was really great.

Ah the ending with Angelina falling was dramatic but really well written. I canít wait to see how Georgeís overprotectiveness for her develops again :P

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! This chapter, specifically. I haven't gotten any feedback yet, and it was one that I was really anxious about posting because of the flashback and the Quidditch.

The first match was part of the flashback. I'd originally thought of "Ron's first time going to see Quidditch" would make a cute little one-shot, but then decided to insert it here. That's the first of three times a one-shot of mine ended up in this novel...

Like I said before... I desperately needed Angelina back in George's life (even as a friend) because I hate it when George is sad.

I don't normally write anything really action-y, so I'm glad you see you thought it was well-written.

I'll be a broken record and say thankyouthankyou!


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