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Review:Cavell says:
Hi, old friend :D It's certainly been a while, hasn't it? Anyway, I'm now here to review this very lovely-looking one-shot of yours, which I've been meaning to read for a while anyway, so this is all very good for me.

Firstly, I quite liked the idea of this one-shot -- I've never read that much of Tonks, and the few stories I have read tend to focus on her joining the Order and falling for Remus etc. so this was definitely a nice change from the usual! While this piece of yours was also a little short, it provided a really nice glimpse into canon that I enjoyed a lot, and I just loved the little nods to canon you sprinkled here and there, like Moody's constant vigilance! and Tonks was just so natural in this and her thoughts and actions were so normal and realistic, like how she thought about her exam scores and practiced fixing her appearance in the mirror. Little details like those just made my stomach flip and think that this would definitely be something that would have happened in canon.

I definitely thought there was enough imagery in this, and it was very well-balanced with Tonks' thoughts and the actual dialogue, and I'm pretty sure I've mentioned this before a while back about how I love the way you describe things because it sounds so natural, except I'm not sure I said it in so many words, but there you go. The flow too, was perfect -- it was slow enough for readers to get in every detail but quick enough so you didn't get bored with the story.

I thought Arielle was very sweet, and her interaction with Tonks was very natural (I've said this a lot, haven't I?) and in-character for a girl and an adult, but at the same time, it fit Tonks' character too like how she noticed the colour of Arielle's dress first and helped her feel better by telling her a funny memory. Honestly, Amanda, you're lovely at writing canon characters -- I couldn't find a single fault about this one-shot and everything was just perfect. Well done, and thank you for requesting!

--Linn

Author's Response: Linn! It's awesome to hear from you and I'm so glad to see you around HPFF again :)

Yeah, it was fun to explore Tonks; she was a character I'd wanted to try for a long while but I couldn't find the right angle to get into her head. Turns out we have a lot in common in terms of not always feeling adequate and being afraid of the unknown. I'm really glad the details worked and that my Tonks felt like the one from canon.

I'm also pleased to hear that the imagery worked well and didn't impede the flow. This one wasn't as heavy on imagery as some of my other pieces, but I felt like the story was more plot- and character-driven so I tried to just weave in the description throughout Tonks's journey to her first day of work.

It was really fun to write Arielle and to allow Tonks an opportunity to play the adult (haha) and be a comfort to a little girl. It's great that you felt like it was integrated well and liked seeing little hints of canon Tonks come out in the moment.

Thanks so much for your sweet review :)

-Amanda


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