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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi, here with your challenge review! I really enjoyed this one-shot because even though it was under 2,000 words the structure you used with the split time frame meant that it felt as if covered a lot more than there really was there.

I thought you Andromeda and Ted really brilliantly and they played off of one another really well. There was the right amount of sweet moments, especially when they gave each other their gifts because Tedís for Andromeda was just so adorable. The thing which made it not too fluffy and work was how there were often those almost silent and jilted moments in which they both remembered what Andromeda sacrificed to come here and be here with him.

The flashbacks were both really great. The first one was really nice because it meant we got a happier and more optimistic version of their life as siblings and seeing that they all got along really made me laugh because they didnít know what would happen in a few yearsí time. I think my favourite there was Cissy because she was just so sweet the way she really wanted to go to Hogwarts and be with her sisters and be grown up.

The other was so much more terrifying but it was worth it to see Bella like that as she was really amazing. Normally, a slap would have felt too much, but with her it was so believable because she isnít one to shy away from Muggle fighting methods as well as using magical ones. I could really sense the dilemma for Andromeda there and I thought you wrote her really well with the way she was trying to balance her home and love life.

I liked how there was still a bit of internal conflict in the final section, because it made sense given what she did but overall it was as if there was inner peace or something. I really enjoyed this one-shot and the results should be posted later on today. :)

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you so very much for your review. I really enjoyed writing this one-shot for your challenge, and it has given me some motivation to continue on with my novel, so thank you for that as well.

I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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