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Review:marauderfan says:
This was a lovely chapter! Ettie's forwardness is quite amusing, particularly with Reg because he has no idea how to react to it, haha. Poor guy. I thought it was sweet that she gave him coffee, and wanted to meet with him after work. She seems quite desperate for a friend, since she can't really trust anyone where she works, and even her old friends like Cho don't associate with her anymore.

You write Umbridge really well! :p She was delightfully awful in this, you've written her mannerisms perfectly and I appreciated Ettie's discomfort with being there but at the same time her desperation to stay at her job. I am not surprised that Umbridge is the type to prefer horrifically sugary tea - how perfect to go with those pink cups and kitten-patterned tea plates.

I liked the contrast between that meeting with Umbridge, and the following meeting with Reg at the Leaky Cauldron (of all places!) At first it was just kind of funny, their awkwardness, but then as it got into the conversation about Juniper Swift, and what might be about to happen with Mary Cattermole, it's evident that Ettie is really unsure where she stands, afraid to commit to any one side but regrets her aid to the Ministry's capture of Swift. I can't really blame her though, considering how she got her job and what happens if she makes a commitment to one side.

One small error here - the bit where Marietta's mother comes in, brow furrowing at the mess her office was in, and at Ettie and Reg in their sodden robes - is after the part where Marietta dried them both off. Unless she's just really bad at the clothes-drying charm, they shouldn't still be soaked, right? :p

But anyway, I really loved this chapter! On to read the last one now :D

Author's Response: FINALLY RESPONDING TO THIS. Forgive me for being awful and tardy with my review responses eep...

I really enjoyed writing Ettie! She's a little bit pathetic at times, and I do enjoy writing her as a slight bully. And Umbridge alksjdcu Umbridge is delightful, isn't she? I have a fluffy Umbridge plunny, would you believe this. Perhaps I should try writing her. Am glad you found her mannerisms convincing, and her portrayal accurate! Umbridge is a very memorable and very specifically characterised figure from canon, and such characters are easy to get wrong, and I'm glad she worked!

ALSKJA THANK YOU for picking up on that continuity error! I know that when I eventually get down to editing this fic, I'll be reading all your reviews again to clear out all those pesky mistakes. The sodden robes thing was me changing parts of the narrative after the whole thing had been written...and forgetting to change all the minor details associated with the changes.

Thank you, love! ♥

teh


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