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Review:kenpo says:
Hey, I told you I'd give you another review to replace your request... so here I am!

Wow. I don't think I've ever read anything like this before. I've always wondered what it was like for Lily, having a child so young. You really provided a lot of insight.

I like that you kept going back to Severus. They'd shared so much, it doesn't surprise me that she'd think about him during big moments like this.

In your A/N, you asked for an opinion about whether or not you strayed too far from canon...

I say absolutely not! People often portray Lily and James as super happy all the time and Yaay, we have a baby!

But really, would they be like that? I'd guess no. I can think of very few people that would be over the moon about having a baby so young, and in the middle of the war. You did an amazing job with conveying her hesitation.

Another think that I loved what how you incorporated her muggle side. She spent 11 years without knowing magic, and I can see her doing this. I don't know if it was intentional or not, but I liked that you talked about how she wished she were a little girl, then she went to the doctor for comfort.

When she was a little girl, she used all muggle things (obviously). She looks to that time in her life with comfort, and so when she's stressed she likes to do muggle things.

Really great one-shot. I'm glad I messed up your review, so I read this!!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for stopping by and replacing my request with another review! That was kind of you!

I'm happy that you felt like Lily's feelings were realistic and in keeping with her canon characterization. I do feel like she would struggle with a lot of doubts during this time in her life, like her failed friendship with Severus and her anxiety over being catapulted into marriage and motherhood. I'm sure she and James loved each other and Harry very much, but I doubt it was a walk in the park for either of them.

I like your point about how it was like she was a child, going to the doctor for comfort all over again. I did think that maybe returning to familiar Muggle surroundings would provide Lily with some comfort.

Thanks for your kind review!

-Amanda


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