Hi, Sam! It's been so long since I've read a chapter of this story. I saw that you marked it complete, so I'm excited that I can now get to the end with no waiting!
Kieron and Nicky are such a funny couple. It's like a light side/dark side, opposites attracting sort of thing. Kieron seems so dark and brooding and somewhat menacing at times. Plainly there's a lot of his father in him. While Nicky seems to have a lot of his mother: more carefree and light-hearted.
I liked the way that you really took your time with this chapter and let things develop at a gradual, natural-feeling pace. There are actually quite a few things that happen, but it didn't feel like you were rushing through it at all.
Neat to see Lexi's relationship with Hea- er, Annie Moore starting to evolve. The introduction of the new healer to fill the gap seemed to cement things into place. Looks like Theo's off the market again!
Darcy and Megan seem so much more excited about things than Lexi, which was actually a very realistic touch. There's something about the knowledge that you're going to have to deliver a baby that tends to temper the enthusiasm of expectant mothers, whereas the mother's close friends can have unmitigated enthusiasm for the entire process. Plus, shopping. Yes, shopping...
The trip to St. Mungo's resonated well with me. I think we made half a dozen unplanned trips to the hospital when we were pregnant with our twins. Every little thing that happens has the potential to be serious. As an expectant parent, you just don't feel like there's room for error.
I loved the way that Lexi's mood and inner monologue change once she's safely at St. Mungo's and knows that everything is going to be alright. She goes back to being more light-hearted and self-deprecating, which is the way I love her.
Healer Rodriguez following with a bottle of water and a cookie. He's already perfect; I love cookies. -- That sums it up pretty nicely!
Lastly, all of the anxiety around the ward for premature and sick babies was a sobering note. It's the kind of reminder that Lexi probably doesn't need, but I think every parent goes through it. It really balanced out the mood of the chapter.
So a couple of typos I noticed:
Nicky let's go of his quill and puts it on top of his knee with the article he's currently writing -- lets go
who knows how to create a storm, lightening and everything. -- lightning
I can feel the end approaching! Soon Al and Lexi will be parents and I'm excited for them both! Nice job!
Author's Response: Hey, Dan!
Yep! Marked complete and with a sequel posted. :)
There is definitely a lot of Theo in Kieron, but with enough of his mother for it to be a terrifying mix. While Nicky is calm and thoughtful of things around him and a bit of a nosy nelly but in such a way that they want to answer him, because he's the nice one. Nicky is so brave. :P
It's been a few years since Theo was off the market, so no one is really complaining (except Tammi/alicia and anne :P). Annie is nice, they like her, and she's friends with both Ginny and Astoria, so they know she can handle the Notts. :P
Lexi is not excited about the whole labor part, which is not something that her friends have to worry about, so I can totally see why they'd be more exciting. And, yes, there's always shopping; Darcy loves shopping. :D
Lexi is a worried first time mum with Albus Potter for a boyfriend; unplanned trips were a given in my head. :P I'm glad you agree. :)
Everything is good when you have cookies! :D Lexi feels safe in the hospital, so she allows herself that calm.
The special care unit was something I felt they needed to see. Yes, for balance and to prepare...
Thank you so much for leaving a review!