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Review:Inthenextlife says:
Hey! This is a really nice start to your story, it makes me wonder what Malfoy's life has deteriorated into if he's so eager to turn attention off himself and that his only plans are to sit around staring at people (in the Leaky Cauldron..? somewhere else?).

For clarification, he thought Astoria was Daphne? Does he have a romantic history with her? My only criticism with that is it seems to me if Draco was really into Daphne, he'd be able to recognize her. It would make sense if you set the scene a little more extensively, just because I don't know where they are, or far Draco is sitting from her, who that guy she was talking to was, and if he was staring at her why didn't he notice that he was walking in her direction, and try harder not to walk into her?

Astoria's career sounds really interesting :) It also sounds like an occupation that would really be needed in the post-war world. I'm glad your story shows the fall-out of such a big conflict- it makes the story already seem more realistic and interesting :)
-Madeline

Author's Response: Hello!

Nah, Draco doesn't have a romantic history with Daphne - he just has a strange obsession with her. He's more in love with the IDEA of Daphne than the actual person. I also believe that after the war he became quite withdrawn and scared. Also, I just made this to be in a cafe/pub-style thing.

Thanks for the feedback and sorry for the delay in the response!

- Kayla :)


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