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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi, here to review your challenge entry!

I really loved this one-shot, because it was just so adorable and sweet and the perfect Christmas story really! Tonks really made this piece with your characterisation of her, because she’s beginning to have the flares of her older self while still maintaining that childlike innocence and the mix of all of that was really great.

You slipped in all of the wotchers really well, and the way she wanted things to aid her in her mischief making was so her because I always imagined her to be a bit of a prankster. The way she felt she was ‘too old’ for this Christmas thing, had me laughing too because she said it in such a determined way and that she was certain she was right but she couldn’t help but give in :P

I thought you caught their family life really well, and even though Ronks is my OTP, I’m glad that you chose to write about this part of her life because it’s so rarely explored so this was a wonderful trip into it. Ted and Andromeda were such wonderful parents too and I could really see how much they cared for her, and you characterised them so well.

I think the most touching section was when Andromeda paused for a moment and said that her daughter was only ten and shouldn’t be acting like this. It was almost as if she didn’t want to let her daughter grow any older which was a great point to include given how turbulent her life became when she reached that age herself.

A small point, but I really liked how you covered several days over this story because it really meant we got to see them in lots of moods, not just one and really got to know their characters as a result.

The ending was so sweet. I was almost tearing up with Andromeda when Tonks began to mention her sisters, and it was so lovely to see that she still missed them, and that sibling bond couldn’t be broken so easily. But then you saved it from going to angsty with Tonks commenting about how Santa wasn’t real, and that just had me laughing.

This was such a brilliant one-shot, so thanks for entering the challenge and the results should be posted soon!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hello! Sorry that I took so long to respond to this- I've been incredibly lazy lately.

Ronks is definitely one of my favourite pairings and I was originally going to do a Ronks piece but then I had the idea for this and I just couldn't pass it up.

I always got the vibe from Tonks that she would have been a little troublemaker since a young age. I can't imagine that Ted and Andromeda ever would have been strict with her.

I think that the family dynamics were a really important thing for this story. Most of my stories revolve around families as well as romance etc. and I just adore the Tonks family so much!

Again, I wanted to show the importance of family with the Black sisters. Though there no longer a real family, I wanted to show that Andromeda would never forget them. I like to think that Narcissa and Bellatrix would have felt the same, at least at one point.

I'm so glad you liked it! And thank you so much for third place. It really made my day to hear that!

x Ely


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