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Review:peppersweet says:
Hiya, here for day eight of the 12 days of reviewing!

This was such a cute and christmassy one-shot. I like how Lily and Mary get their own back on James and Sirius ultimately, especially with the help of Remus and Peter. I really liked how just adorably fluffy it was, and how well you depicted the Maraudersí friendship - a lot of writers tend to slip in as many hints as possible about Peter being a bad egg, which is unrealistic because he was a marauder, so I appreciate that you didnít do that here. Also, loved how sarky Remus was. (James, thinking? Blasphemy!)

One wee criticism I have is that your phrasing was a little awkward in places. I donít really get this one line in particular: They each put four up in the locations that Lily had overheard and with the help of the others. I understand the first bit about Lily overhearing the locations of the mistletoe, but the Ďhelp of the othersí bit confused me. Do you mean Remus and Peter?

Good job, though! Happy 2014 :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Yeah, I always get really annoyed when authors tend to make Peter as a bad guy from day one. In my opinion, if the Marauders were prepared to die for Peter he must have been a pretty good friend! You don't just die for anyone!

Haha, I'm glad you liked Remus! :p

Yeah, I meant Remus and Peter but I wanted to try and be subtle and not ruin the prank idea. I admit that I felt that was awkward but I couldn't think of a way to change it. If I think of another way to write it, I'll fix it up! Thanks for pointing it out, though!

Thank you for the lovely review! Happy 2014 to you too! :D

- Kayla :)


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