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Review:Infinityx says:
Hi there! I'm here for the seventh day of the 12 days of reviewing challenge.

This was such an amazing start to the story. It's great to see that your main character is one who isn't very recognized in the original series. The way you've portrayed his character seems very fitting though. I absolutely love your writing style. Your descriptions are very vivid and set the mood of the story perfectly. I love the way you've established Theo's background about his father and his plan. It gives the story a very well rounded feel.

One thing that I couldn't help but wonder is how Voldemort didn't see Theo's intentions, being an expert at legilimency. I think it was quite ingenious, the way Theo escaped. There could be a bit more emphasis on Theo's feelings towards the end. That part seems a bit rushed compared to the beginning.

I think it was a brilliant first chapter and I'll definitely come back and continue reading. :)

Cheers!
- Erin

Author's Response: Hey, Erin!

I love Theo, he's my favorite character ever because I get to make him my own while still keeping with canon. He's one of my most complex characters, I think. :)

Voldemort doesn't see it because he can hide it, it's something to do with his gifts and he tells the others about it at some point. But I do plan on going back and editing the end at some point, to make it better.

Thank you so much for leaving a review!

Sam.


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