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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for the review exchange from TGS! I am awfully sorry once again for the time it has taken me to get here. Wish you a belated Happy New Year's though! :)

This short story collection is very unique and interesting and I totally love your concept. I have not read much of Andromeda so your take on her, in her various stages of life, is going to be a treat to read, and this first chapter certainly didn't disappoint.

I think you did a great job in writing this from a little girl's point of view, the writing style, thought patterns, dialogue etc. all matched it. Your portrayal of Andromeda, of how she stands up to Bella and doesn't want to marry Lucius and worries for Narcissa, was very nicely done. It showed a glimpse of how her personality will develop as she grows up and it was great.

I also liked the brief appearance of Lucius. He is so different from the Lucius we see as an adult and yet this scared little boy is still in there somewhere inside him, and I loved how you focused on the little boy here which we know he'll grow to hide - I hope this sentence made some sense xP Nonetheless, I really liked the way you wrote him.

The entire pureblood-mudblood scenario was also touched upon nicely. The little details such as Andromeda's "friendliness" towards house-elves also showed her character and somewhat foreshadowed the kind of nice woman she'll grow up to be, so it was all pretty good.

I don't have any CC for you. The grammar, flow, dialogue, characterisation, and overall narrative was really good and made for an interesting and good read. I'm surely going to read the next chapter when I get the time.

Great job! Keep writing!
10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey Aditi! Don't worry about the wait, I knew you were with your family and it's important that you spend time with them!

I'm glad that you liked the concept of it because Andromeda and the Black family as a whole have always interested me because the relationship changes of the siblings are rarely looked into, and Andromeda always seems to be cut off when she leaves home so I wanted to show a new side to that.

It was actually a ton of fun writing from that perspective, so it's great that you liked it. I think the best thing was trying to figure out how Andromeda would be beginning to rebel against her family while still be a caring sister and child, so yay for it working!

Haha, that sentence does make sense so don't worry at all. I think given his high levels of self-preservation witnessed in both of the wars, he must have been rather timid as a child because he knew what being on the wrong side was like, so that was almost a second nature to him.

Oh yes, the foreshadowing :P I suppose the friendliness to the house elves sort of came from Regulus and Kreacher too because Kreacher was the one who allowed him to finally redeem himself.

Thanks for a great review, and if you do ever have time it would be great to read more of your views on the story!

-Kiana


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