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Review:nott theodore says:
Aw, this was definitely my favourite chapter so far! Each of these chapters has just kept getting better, and I think it's great that this one is the best of them all, because you've written it in a way that will make sure I remember, and has left a lasting impression.

This chapter felt a lot more reflective than the others, which was fitting considering the events that have happened in Andromeda's life, and also the fact that she's visiting the graves of her daughter and son-in-law and her husband. I felt really sorry for her when I thought about just how much she has lost in this war that she tried to get away from.

Teddy was such an adorable kid in this chapter! It must be hard for her to take him along, and I liked the detail that you mentioned about him not always remembering that he didn't have parents. There's nothing easy in this situation, there are no winners, and Teddy tracing his mother's name was so heartbreaking! I did like the inclusion of him still being a playful child though, and his hair changing colour the way that it did. It was as if some of Tonks and Remus was still there, despite the fact they were lying in their graves. In fact the way that you used description and colour in the whole of this chapter was really effective and beautiful.

When Andromeda was talking to Remus and Tonks it was so heartbreaking! The emotion felt really raw and it was really realistically written, and you made me feel so emotional. It just reminded me of how upset I got when I was reading the books and watching the films, because it's so awful that they both died and left Teddy without any parents.

I really enjoyed the deeper introspection in this chapter, and I think it was really effective. I felt like Andromeda had definitely come to terms with her past and who she is much more than any other point in the story, even though she's lost so much. The mentions of her age taking effect and how Harry was starting to help more and become a bigger part of their lives were really nice details too. I think my favourite thing was how you tied everything in to the title Broken Crown, and ended the story on a note of hope.

Brilliant story, Kiana, and it's been really lovely to read!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hey Sian! I'm so glad that you liked this one because it was very hard writing this given that I had to deal with Andromeda grieving and then my grief for Remus, Tonks and Ted appearing now and then too :P

I'm glad that you picked up on the reflective tone, because I think the second war really rammed home to Andromeda what a good choice she made to get while she could, and took away all those regrets she may have had at her mother's funeral. I know, she really did suffer the most out of all the people because she lost all her family through and it made she and Cissy even more divided.

Aw, Teddy, writing him here made me feel even more sorry for him. I never thought about the aspect of it being hard for Andromeda to take him around with her but it really must be as he doesn't remember anything and still has a chance of happiness. Aw, I always imagined Teddy being the next Tonks so I'm glad that you liked the bit about his hair changing colour. Gah, I can't even comment on Remus and Tonks without nearly blubbering up it's so sad. I can't cope with it all really :'( I'm glad that you liked the use of colour, because this whole family was so colourful so it seemed to make sense to include it.

I'm so glad that you thought the scene with Andromeda talking to the two of them was well written because I really wanted to get it right as they're my OTP. I guess the only thing I can say to cheer us both up is that at least Teddy had his grandmother whereas Harry had no one apart from Petunia who didn't really love him. :(

I'm glad that you felt that through the refection, Andromeda had almost found herself and who she wanted to be through it all. At least their deaths brought about one positive thing for them all. I really wish I could explore her and Harry's bond sometime, because I imagine he would have been very influential over Teddy given how he wanted him to have a different life to his, and how he knew his parents and yeah.

I'm going to have to cut this response off here because it's too sad thinking about all the dead people. Thank you for this amazing review, Sian, and all the other ones too! ♥

-Kiana


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