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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
Hello Amanda, I'm here for the Review tag :)

I really love reading stories about Tonks, she's a character I've never been brave enough to attempt myself because I'd probably get her all wring but I think you did beautifully. I adored the first few paragraphs where you talked about her hair changing colour involuntarily, I can just picture her sitting in front of her mirror scrunching her nose up in frustration. Lovely!

You've captured her forgetfulness and clumsiness in just the right amount too, some stories I've read featuring Tonks have her tripping over something every five minutes and it can be a little tiresome but small details like "Unfortunately, none of its beautiful facets helped her remember which floor she was supposed to be on." and the story about setting the curtains on fire work really well in your story.

Something I noticed about your writing style in this and 'Spies' is that you have this wonderful talent for adding little details in to your story that really gives them character. Like this:

He had always talked about the possibility of teaching them to jump through fiery hoops, like in one of his fatherís books about Muggle circuses

Just so perfectly Arthur. I love it.

There are also some really wonderful descriptions throughout this, the Ministry being my favourite, I adored the idea of the mosaic tiles :)

I'm afraid I don't have any advice to offer you with this at all, it was lighthearted, fun and a thoroughly enjoyable read!

Author's Response: Hey there, long time no talk!

Tonks was really intimidating to me at first, but I tried to put myself in her shoes and remember a time when I was trying something new and felt like maybe I wouldn't be good at it. From there, it was pretty easy to make connections between my experience and how she might perceive it :)

Yeah, I made sure not to make her too clumsy but also not to pull her out of character. I'm glad the details worked well, too. I liked adding in that little bit about Arthur and Charlie, so I'm happy you picked up on it. I think Charlie and Tonks could have gotten into quite a bit of trouble and made a few messes over the course of their friendship!

Thanks for your lovely review!

-Amanda


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