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Review:peppersweet says:
Meghna! I’m here for the 12 days of reviewing challenge.

This was such a cute one-shot, I loved it. It was great getting to see into Parvati’s life for a change and what she gets up to after Hogwarts - she’s not a minor character I’ve read too much about in fanfiction, so I really enjoyed this, especially as you set with her family in India. Her mother’s matchmaking was hilarious and made me feel a little sorry for Parvati, especially when I read this line: Parvati stared into her empty tea cup as if she could see the figure of the Grim in it. Also, the bit where her mum asks if the boys are clean or not (’Bathing is important. Do they have a bath twice a day?’ - kinda sounds like my dad, to be honest, who’s always badgering me to find a rich English boy). I loved her little exclamation of ’Broomsticks and bakwaas!’ and how you called back to it right at the end. Vinod seems like he’d get on with Parvati really well - part of me hopes that, after this, they’d befriend one another in London and get up to all sorts of magical hi-jinks. Ahh, Vinod is such a cutie. I know you’re a busy med student and all but can we get a Vinod/Parvati (b)romance fic? Can we can we can we please please please??

I’ve just got one wee criticism, which is that your tenses jumped around a bit in this, e.g She began to wonder if it’s too late to floo back to London, and if she really can endure a whole three weeks back home. - it started in the past tense, and this line sort of jumps right into present, and throughout the fic you fluctuated between past and present a little too much. This is something you could definitely fix with editing though.

Great work, so glad I read this! Happy 2014 :) ♥

Author's Response: How does this story have so many new reviews. Let alone one from Julia herself. Bring me my fan, Dobby.
TENSE KINKS BE THE DEATH OF ME. I was so frazzled by the end of this story that I just thought o.k. it doesn't matter if it looks like I don't know basic grammar LET'S JUST PUBLISH YEAH? and look what's happened. But omg I did not expect you to like this or anybody for that matter but here you are being kind and sugary ;A; THANK YOU. xoxo


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