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Review:BookDinosaur says:
Hello! I'm here for the Seventh of the Twelve Days of Reviewing. :)

I really enjoyed reading this little oneshot. You really managed to paint your characters really well with this, and I really empathised with Remus here, feeling like he doesn't want to intrue on his friends' Christmas but at the same time feeling so alone and sad. :( Poor Remus.

And Amelia was equally good, we didn't see much of her, but she's friendly and bold and I already like her. I would love to read some more about her, she seems like a really interesting character already, and you know your writing is good when I want to read more after this really short oneshot. The story was really sweet as well, I really liked the idea that maybe Remus could become friends with a Muggle girl.

I love how you wrote about him turning into a werewolf, especially that first time when he was only ten, it was so heartbreaking to read about! It just sent shivers up my spine, how he had to endure all that pain because of one stupid werewolf. Being a werewolf must be so painful, and it's not any better that society will treat them so badly. :(

My only CC for you, I think, would be that the ending drops off a little suddenly, like they're getting to know each other and then bam! the story ends and I'm left here going but waht happens next?

You did an absolutely fantastic job with this oneshot, I really enjoyed reading it and I'm glad I had the chance to read it!

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for stopping by!

Characterization was my biggest goal here because there isn't really something you would call a plot here. So it is great you thought the characters well done!

I know, Remus is so alone :( He seems like someone who just doesn't want to get in the way. And also the fact that he feels he'd be getting in the way just kills me.

I loved writing Amelia! I'm writing another one shot that is from her point of view and you get to learn more about her and you'll see more interaction between her and Remus.

I had actually planned he whole thing to be dark like the little snippets but the fluff took over haha! As for the ending I think I will edit it a bit to that it is not so abrupt :)

Thank you so much for dropping by and have with the last four days of reviewing!

- Sankavi ^_^


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