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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Amanda here for the 12 days of reviewing on the forums!

I thought this was a really great one-shot because not only did it feel so full and detailed for 500 words, but it was a really interesting part of Siriusí life with the way heís trying to rebel against his parents and break free but in a way heís still not ready to leave. Even though that wasnít the main focus of the story you wrote his emotions in such a way I could place him immediately.

I also liked the nod to the Order of the Phoenix with the way there was a boggart in the writing desk and you built the suspense up to that really well and it definitely fitted in with the challenge. The horror of seeing those bodies of his friends was so gruesome in a way and terrifying too and the fear of Sirius was really palpable. Then the way he couldnít defeat the boggart fitted in well with the idea that he never could really escape his family or escape the deaths of his friends, and that was some really great foreshadowing there.

The bit at the end with Walburga had me laughing just because we could really see where her priorities lay with valuing heirlooms over the life of her son, and it just shows what a nice mother she was :P Then the closing line just showed how bad these pureblood families are because objects are more priceless than lives.

Great one-shot Amanda!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey Kiana :)

It's great that the emotion worked well here, because that's definitely what I was going for. I didn't even really think about how his inability to overcome the Boggart symbolized his eternal tie to his family, but that's a great observation and I think it's a really cool way of looking at this.

Yeah, Walburga isn't winning "Mother of the Year" anytime soon. I think part of that last bit was her being superficial, and part of it was meant to reflect that she knows what's in the desk and fears it too. I wonder what form the Boggart would take for her?

Thanks for your sweet review!

-Amanda


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