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Review:peppersweet says:
Hattieee! Iíve been meaning to read this for a while, so Iíve arrived here for day 6 of the 12 days of reviewing challenge.

I have to confess that, when I started reading this, I assumed Victoire was narrating it - I only made the Teddy connection in chapter two! But it made for some great mental images in the meantime. I will not let that detract from the creepiness of the fic, however.

Loved this line: For a moment, I am in pain. I revel in the fact that it is not caused by you. - as an initial introduction to their relationship, anyway!

I really like the bit where Teddy points out that he can change physically very easily, whereas Victoire can change her personality or thoughts with the same relative ease as her Ďbeauty remains constantí. I, er, donít have anything deep to say about it, I just think itís a really interesting comparison.

Itís ironic how the child born at the end of an old war gave birth to a new one. - also love this line. So! Much!!

The rhythm of this fic is excellent; it feels like a constant, rolling beat as Teddy walks. Iím not sure if I read it right, but I got the feeling that there was a weird sort of timescale going on here, specifically in chapter 5 when Teddy talked about his relationship with the other girl. It seemed to be over so quickly that I reasoned that the fic is set in a sped-up version of Teddyís life; instead of being a moment of him running to actually hunt out Victoire, itís more of a metaphor for his process of getting over her after the end of their relationship. I mean, I might be so wrong - I am very hungover and tired today and not reading stuff right (happy 2014!!) - but itís the feeling I get. But wait!! Victoire is in Azkaban? Sheís an actual murderer? I THOUGHT THESE WERE JUST METAPHORS HATTIE WHAT ARE YOU DOING TO MY EMOTIONS. I also might be wrong about the timescale thing. Heís not getting over her!! Not at all!! HEíS SWIMMING IN THE NORTH SEA NOT GETTING OVER HER!!!

Dude. Wow. That ending. All the way through this fic I just assumed it was about a creepy Teddy, you know? And nowÖI know better.

Okay, seriously, well done, Hatz. After reading this last chapter I can see how tightly constructed and put-together this is. Itís melodramatic, but in the best possible way, and I definitely didnít see the end coming (I just assumed that when he mentioned she killed people, he meant likeÖmetaphorically? By breaking their hearts? Because Iím naive and too innocent for this world?). Brilliant job!

p.s happy new year! ♥ ♥ ♥

Author's Response: Hi Julia!

That's a big issue with how flowery this story is: no one seems to know what's going on, but if you put big flashing arrows in it, it breaks the flow...

God, rereading this is horrible! I sound so pretentious and everyone's an edgy smoker who's obsessed with beauty and perfection, and everyone's so hipster! And potentially glorification of suicide, but we won't go into that. I'm glad you like it though! Your comments mean a lot, even if I'm a little embarrassed.

I'm unsure, too, of how long a timescale this fic takes place in. I tried to get some sort of rhythm going with Teddy's running, interspersed with memories and flashbacks of their time together, to give readers a hint of how cray she is! I think he's going over these moments as justification for killing/attacking her, which he is initially trying to do, until he succumbs to her charms again!

Swimming a la Sirius! Dogs in water, vague connection, I don't know. Plus I assume that by this point that Dementors aren't employed so it would be easy for him to enter the prison.

YAY MELODRAMA! Thank you so much for your kind words, honestly it means a lot coming from you, and happy new year to you too! (Responding to this in 2016 lol but it is the 5th January!)

♥ ♥ ♥


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