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Review:peppersweet says:
Hey! Here for the 12 days of reviewing challenge.

Awh, this was a very sweet little chapter! I like Rose’s narration. It seemed kinda bittersweet, actually. She seems a little isolated and out of the loop. I like this angle on her - very often, she’s written as a tempestuous, popular ‘it’ girl, so it’s nice to see her as someone who’s just confused and a little quiet. And also very in love with Scorpius (but who wouldn’t be?). I love that her narration still sounded typically teenager-y, though, like this line: Being a teenager is the hardest job around, married people just don’t understand. They already have someone to be with forever. I, as a teenager, don’t know who I’m going to be with in the next hour. I want to be married already. Though I have this feeling dad might not be up to the idea as much as I am. - I laughed out loud at this! I especially liked the opening. I always wonder that too when I read fan fiction - where do people at Hogwarts snog? Surely broom cupboards are full of doxies and…brooms??

One thing that did strike me was that some of the phrasing in this chapter was a little off - mostly misplaced commas, the like. For example: I should have been a bit embarrassed by his surprisingly accurate account of me and Transfiguration but I was too flustered to say anything. should read ‘I should have been a bit embarrassed by his surprisingly accurate account of me and Transfiguration, but I was too flustered to say anything’.

Oh, Rosie. Just tell him you like him! Great opening :) happy new year! ♥

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