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Review:marauderfan says:
Hello! I'm here with the 6th day of the 12 Days of Reviewing over on the forums.

Wow - from the beginning I'm struck by just how much this reminds me of the opening to Philosopher's Stone. Firstly, the "Normal Boy" aspect is great, it pays homage to Rowling's opening chapter "The Boy Who Lived", but in this case Liam is no hero, he's just no one important in particular. And your opening lines about asking the neighbours are really great too, as it's the same in PS! I love the way you've emulated JKR's writing in the beginning of the HP series in this way, but put your own spin on it to tell a very different story.

Ooh, Liam's magic does appear to be a bit more advanced and of a different nature than most Muggle-born kids. I have a feeling this will be an important plot point later on!

I love how you've updated Hogwarts' invitation letter. It makes sense that it would change over time - especially as colourful brochures attract more attention - and it still has that magical feel to it, since it only changes when someone of magical blood touches it. It's a really creative way of updating the wizarding world.

Liam's mother seems to have taken the news pretty well. I liked her comment that Lakewood sounds better as a name haha! "Hogwarts" really is an odd name.

This is a really good start and I'm eager to see where it goes! :)

Author's Response: This was exactly what I was driving at. I'm mimicking Rowling's style while drawing a firm distinction between my hero and hers. My story will follow her template for a while, and then diverge, much like a jazz artist will play with a song before extemporizing.

I also wanted to show the passage of time, how the new regime are making their mark on the wizarding world, and to the school specifically. There will be some changes to the staff while other teachers remain, providing continuity.

For Liam's "Juvenile Magic", my analogy is music. Some musicians have an intuitive sense - they can pick up an instrument and play without much instruction. However, when those same musicians have to learn Music Theory, they often struggle. I wanted Liam to struggle in the same way with his incantations and wand work .


There is much more for you to read. Annie will voice some deep misgivings in Chps 2 and 3, but of course, Liam will come to Hogwarts. There are many characters for you to meet, and I will take you places Rowling did not. Please keep posting your reviews! Fondly, KJ


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