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Review:nott theodore says:
Kiana! I've not reviewed properly for so long and I've been trying to get back to this story for ages (also, you need to stop being such a fast writer, because you know I'm already struggling to keep up :P). This was another great chapter! I've never read more than a one-shot about Andromeda before, but I really liked the way that this is written.

The contrasts in this chapter were really effective. The beginning had definite undertones of fear and worry, and it made it quite tense to read about Andromeda and Ted spending time together in Hogwarts, where any of Andromeda's family could see her. I kept expecting something to happen, and someone to discover them, and that must be the way that she felt about the situation, so you communicated that really well with your writing. But it was also really sweet to see the two of them together, and the fact that he'd told his parents about her made me aww a bit! I could see glimpses of why Andromeda risked so much to meet with Ted in the first place as well.

The second section was a real contrast to the beginning, because it had a lot more overt tension, and things felt a lot more serious. I liked the fact that you'd skipped forward quite a few years and I could see the change in Cissy especially, because of that. She's definitely stronger, and more prepared to stand up for herself, like with the names - or at least, she attempts to! I really felt sorry for Andromeda here because she could see that Narcissa was sort of slipping into the hands of the Death Eaters as well, and she already knows that Bella's beyond help. It was nice to see Cissy so against killing people because of their blood status, although it means that I'm interested to see how you develop that over the course of this story, because obviously she comes to accept it when she's married to Lucius.

This was a great chapter, Kiana, and I'll be back for the next one soon!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Sian! Haha, it's fine and sorry about the fast updated it's what happens when you do NaNo and have a ton of stuff waiting to be posted :P I hadn't read more about her before this, so writing this was a ton of fun!

I'm glad that you liked the contrasts in this chapter, because Andromeda's life is full of them. Haha, I thought about someone stumbling across them but then I thought that they get so few happy moments in their life that denying them this one would be too cruel. I'm so glad that you liked seeing them together and it wasn't too fluffy or anything, because writing these two somehow manages to fall into the fluff category very easily :P

I'm glad that you liked the change, because I almost had more fun writing Cissy in different stages of her life than I did with Andromeda because the influences on her are so evident. I'm glad that you liked both sides of Cissy with the whole purebloods will rule thing but then the abhorring murder too, because I would like to think that she did have some sort of conscious down there :P Hmm, don't be so sure of her acceptance (well, in this story anyway), I played with it a little because I really want to make her a good character deep down!

Thanks for such a great review, Sian, and for all the others one too!

-Kiana


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