For the 12 Days of Reviewing!
Uhm, whoa, Dan?
So this was an.. awkward chapter to read. Honestly, my mind is blown and I am speechless (I accidentally wrote special instead of speechless and it made me laugh haha). I liked everything about this chapter, the intensity and the fear as well. Draco Malfoy was like a cherry on top. You write him to well.
He could already see himself falling into some of the same habits as his father, especially when it came to letting the women in his life deal with nagging social matters. -- This. This was tough. It was the sign that showed what type of a person he would become in due time.
When he talked about Umbridge, it made me laugh. You used words like, sashayed, and that visual that appeared was really amusing.
Draco and Pansy--forgive me-- were gross. Ew. Like, I do not mind Astoria obviously, she's awesome but Pansy is so creepy, I was cringing way too much during that. Not only was that disgusting, but so was Draco. It broke my heart to see how he treated her. She was enjoying it but... no. He.. he wasn't treating her well. It was bad. And sick. What he was doing was not appropriate. To him, Pansy was something he could use at his disposal. The way he was being arrogant and bragged... it made me sick. I was disgusted and disappointed. He is so twisted and nyah. The way his mind works is scary and he's like animal honestly. An ugly teenager who is so twisted. And stupid Pansy falling for him!
You have the world's most perfect Snape. It's as great as J.K.R's. He was my hero, saving me from that dreadful scene. I was so glad for him entering. His dialogue DAN! HOW? I think you should write a canon Snily just because you get into his head so well. I need to see more things from you about him.
Obliviating Crabbe and Goyle was a nice touch. Avoiding all plot holes, I see ;) Also, I could help but think, "YES, YESS!" when this happened:
Everything he had spent the last few hours imagining, his entire life, was swirling down the drain before his eyes.--LOLOL. YES,ME LIKE.
Anyways, great writing as always. You write Draco so well. Will be back soon!
Author's Response: Hi, there! So based on carefully reading the subtle messages between the lines of this review, I don't think you like Draco very much. ;) I don't blame you. He isn't very likeable at this stage of the story. If you like seeing him get beat up, keep reading. His life isn't going to be much fun at all for the next 4 chapters.
Draco is sort of special here, now that you mention it. He's an arrogant, obnoxious, entitled and self-important pureblood scion who's about to get his first unpleasant dose of that thing that the other 99% call "real life".
I was experimenting with pushing the envelope when I wrote Draco and Pansy, trying to see what I could really do without breaking the rules. While it is a bit gross to imagine, I was actually pleasantly surprised by what's really possible. People complain so much about feeling constrained by the rules against NC-17 material and the rather conservative interpretation of what isn't allowed under an M rating. If anything, I proved to myself that you can write a very ribald scene within the limits of the ToS.
Aww, I really appreciate you saying that about Snape. He's incredibly fun to write. I just let my inner Alan Rickman run free and tried not to let my fingers fall behind. And you will *never* find me writing any sort of Snape-Lily story, canon or otherwise. While Snape may have had a few admirable traits, his twisted, obsessive, possessive love of Lily was not one of them in my mind.
I think of Snape as being very, very thorough. He didn't survive as a spy in the Dark Lord's inner circle without covering all of his bases. Both Crabbe and Goyle have Death Eaters for fathers. Snape wouldn't take any chance of anything he had done getting back to them.
I do like the idea of Draco sitting there, feeling stunned and empty as everything he'd been plotting suddenly fell apart before his eyes. If anyone ever deserved it, it was him.
I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. This chapter was incredibly fun to write, especially the ending. Thanks for reading and reviewing and good luck in the 12 days challenge!