Hello Kiana! I'm here for the Sixth of the Twelve Days of Reviewing Challenge over at the forums. :) I've been meaning to read this anyway, so the Challenge is a good thing now.
I really like that you've written this about Andromeda, she's such an amazing character but I don't see many stories about her here, and her life story is really interesting. I love how you've characterised her, she seems intelligent and witty but you also did a great job getting across how young she was. I felt really bad for her when her mother just told her that she was goon g to get married to Lucius and ignored what she had to say, it was perfect for the someone of the Black House to do to their daughter.
The way you had Bella already preaching to Cissy and Andromeda about blood purity and muggleborns was very canon but it also made me really sad because it shows us how little childhood that the Black sisters had, from the youngest age imaginable they were lectured and the belief that pure bloods were better were instilled into them and I couldn't really blame them for following their parents' instructions and it makes me respect Andromeda all the more, because of course she's one of the rare people who realise that this belief is wrong and she breaks away from the household.
I really liked how meek and submissive Cissy is towards her older sister, and how scared and snivelling Lucius is - when they came out in the sixth book and defied the Dark Lord for the love of their son was so important to me, and I think that if they had been a little stronger, a little less submissive, they might have had the courage to defy the family rules as well, they might have seen how wrong it was. How sad. :(
I really loved your little mention of Uncle Alphard! I remember Sirius talked about him, and it makes sense that he would be known throughout the family as a madman.
I really can't wait to read on from here, I think one of the most fascinating things here would be the development of Andromeda and I can't wait to see how that turns out! Great work, Kiana! :D
Author's Response: Hey Emily! Yes, the reviewing challenge was great for that, which reminds me I need to do the one for today still :P
I'm so glad that you liked her and my characterisation of her, because she's always been such a background pivotal character (if that even makes sense...) in my opinion so it was nice to finally explore that side to her. Yes, sadly the Black family don't tend to go for love and all that jazz, but I tired to show how Cissy and Andromeda could change that in this story.
Haha, I know what you mean about Bella's actions and it almost reminded me of what the Nazis did to the children too. Well, when you look at it there are lots of links between the Nazis and the Death Eaters which all tie in really well with the other points you made about them not knowing what else to do other than follow. I know, I can't help but feel proud of her too, but it does make me wonder whether she would have done the same if she hadn't found Ted or not :P
Those two do rather like energy in this chapter, don't they? I suppose they always sort of did what they thought would serve them best, apart from in the 6th and 7th book and it was nice to see that there was something more of substance there ;P
Haha, every family always has the odd mad one in it. I'm so glad that you liked this chapter, and it was really interesting to read all of your comments for it.
Thanks for such a great review Emily :D