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Review:ohmymerlin says:
Hello again! I thought I'd review again because I promise I will get to all of them but I'm going away tomorrow for a week (meaning no HPFF) so there's going to be a massive break again. I'm so sorry for the delays!

This was another great chapter! I loved Fabian, Gideon and Molly's interactions. I love seeing siblings in novels and fanfictions. :)

Although one thing tha stuck out to me was the Pygmy Puff Surf Team. Correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought they were Fred and George's creations? I just did a quick Google search and a few sites came up saying they modified Puffskeins so I don't think Pygmy Puffs would have existed back then!

Also, I feel like Molly is a bit out of character. I know she's younger and would obviously be a bit different but it feels too modern the way she's speaking? She was born in 1949 so this would be like the sixties and they did speak a lot differently.

Anyway, I also liked the interaction between his mother and himself. It kind of shows where Molly got her techniques from, haha! :p And Fabian is a total Mummy's boy, isn't he? ;)

Anywho, I really enjoyed this chapter and I'll try and complete the reviews soon! When I come back from my holiday I solemnly swear I will review!

- Kayla :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for reviewing! Yeah, we should probably change that band name, I feel like we were just thinking of random magical phrases to throw together into band names. Puffskein Surf Team should be a good name too! I agree that Molly probably doesn't sound as '60s as she could, I especially don't think they'd have used buzzwords like "sexual harassment" back then. At the same time, I'd rather write her a little more modern, just because I think she'd probably sound a little stale/awkward if we tried to sixties-ify it, just because I couldn't write naturally because I don't know that much about '60s British lingo/speaking style. Maybe as the story goes on and we get to know her better as a character, we'll try and make her dialogue more era-appropriate.
Yeah, we liked focusing on their sibling relationship just because Fabian and Gideon sounded so interesting and Molly barely ever talks about them in the series. Thanks again for reviewing :) And Rebekah and I will get on reviewing your stories!
-Madeline


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