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Review:SilentConfession says:
This is such an interesting story. Something I wouldn't have clicked on without the TGS review swap and I'm really pleased we were able to exchange, this is a really nicely written tale.

I love how you've characterized Dominique. I've seen her with similar traits to how you've done her, but you've taken her a lot further than most. I really like how you've done that and made her truly a hate able character. She's really well written, in how we see next to no remorse for her actions. She seems to be simply going through the motions of her rituals and it has no effect. She's perfected her craft to this point that it's second nature. It almost seems like she seeks these men out rather than all the male species being crap and trying to take advantage of her. I found myself not believing her when she was going on about the Weasley fame. Although I think there would be a certain type of notoriety with the name, it seemed to be warped by her current perception. I felt like that bit was her own delusions and incapability to see reality clearly. So she's come up with her own motivations to live like she does. It gives her a sort of 'go' on the whole they deserve this because they use my family name and want to abuse me. So i thought you wrote all that really well.

The tone of the story was also really well done too. It fit Dominique perfectly! I love stories which the tone of the writing fits the characterization. It seemed a bit detached and cold which is exactly like your main character. It really helped get inside Dominique's mind and feel what she's feeling. You've also really subtly fitted in bits of her backstory that gives us a glimpse of the steps that have led her up to this point, but there are still loads of questions in my head about that. Which I really like to see in a story as it makes me feel like the story is fully and more complete (if that makes any sense, it just has the sense that there is more to it, that someone else could come into this story and write their own interpretations of it).

I also really like how you've added Amelia into the game. It really gives the story a dark turn as Dominique brings down another woman who could have just been heartbroken, but moved on. Now, however, she's going down a tunnel that will make her more and more withdrawn like Dom.

Really lovely job here. Really happy wIw as able to read this.

Author's Response: Hello there, I've finally gotten around to answering this review fourteen days after you left it.

It has been mentioned that I've taken her a lot further than most people have when it comes to writing her personality. I was quite proud of the fact that I made Dom downright psychopathic. It does seem like she's seeking these men out, after doing this so many times it's like she ends up finding these type of men without really realising that she's doing it.

I've been working on making the tone fit the story because it's been pointed out to me that it's something that I need to work on. I'm glad that you like the little pieces of backstory. When I read through it the first time it seemed to me like Dom was doing all of this just because she could, she was going to such extremes just because she knew she could get away with it and that didn't seem like a good enough reason to me for her to do something like harm William. People more often than not have reasons for doing things and something had to have happened in her past in order to set her on the road to being the person that she currently is.

Thank you so much for this absolutely lovely review!


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