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Review:peppersweet says:
Hello, here for the forums 12 days of reviewing challenge! I went looking for dark one-shot and came across this. I have a weird love of reading about Malfoys, Death Eaters, and all characters moste evile, so this suited me perfectly.

Wow, this was beautifully written. Your grammar and phrasing is flawless. For a while I thought this was just going to be a meandering one-shot about Narcissa and Bellatrix, but the twist where Lucius appeared absolutely floored me - I didn't see it coming at all! I was on the verge of criticising you for making Bellatrix seem too nice, to be honest, but I completely take that back. Those last two sections change everything and, in retrospect, her actions seem entirely malicious. I'm inclined to believe that she's made the whole thing up and is keeping Narcissa prisoner, possibly keeping her ill as well. This one-shot is dark and utterly disturbing in the best possible way. At first I thought Bellatrix's actions were unusual, but, thinking back on it, it entirely makes sense - I assume this is set immediately following the final battle, once Bellatrix has lost everything. Whilst I don't endorse what she does, I feel like it makes sense that she would do it...not sure I expressed that very well!

"It feels different to lose your mind, Cissy. You're not going mad." - whoa, this line is really chilling when I look back. Well done - this fic is so tightly composed, and I didn't see the twist coming at all. Great work! Happy new year ♥

Author's Response: Hello there!

First of all - so sorry for the late reply, I totally didn't get a notification and only checked the Archive now at this very moment. Anyway, thank you SO, SO much for this amazing review! I am so incredibly happy that you liked it - and your compliment regarding my grammar/phrasing truly flatters me (I'm Austrian and therefore an ESL; I've written fanfiction for many years of my life but only switched to writing in English in early 2011). I'm honestly quite speechless, but I have to say that I'm incredibly proud of how this piece turned out; while writing I kept on changing my mind of what I wanted to do with Narcissa's illness and Bellatrix (who I do believe loves Narcissa, but the war has changed and ruined a lot) but in the end decided to just let it flow and this is what happened.

I cannot tell you often enough how glad I am that you enjoyed it! Thank you so, so much again and happy new year to you, too!

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